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for the price of a burger

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Corazon
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0 posted 06-01-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

ninety nine cents plus just
one more
the cost of a burger or fries or a drink
wendies value menu
your choice
for only one dollar
plus one nickle more
(he forgets about tax
and how I had to look under
the seat for five pennies more)
you not only stepped
into mistrust
you threw us
into reverse
lightspeed
a hamburger, for lunch?
(inquisition reins free)
but you took lunch today
(your eyes grew dark)
isn't that kind of strange?
(your eyes scream disbelief)

a hamburger yes!
(indignant am I)
and why not, just happened
by there was I
a dollar menu
a perfect bargain
for me
(food saved for tomorrow
makes perfect sense to me)
returned that skirt that fit
much too big
killed two birds with one
stone
or so I did think
(what does he think
not the lure of pickles
cheese and meat
but indiscreet lips
tempted me?)

words too sharp
quickly speed  into pain
(he's got to be kidding
I won't take this blame)
angry turn of my heel
silence the menu
now up for choosing
(you can order
up the anger
to go along side
but I wouldn't recommend it)

for the price of a burger
you threw
us
aside
(I shake my head and cry)




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Balladeer
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1 posted 06-01-2000 11:00 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Corazon, this one's a Whopper! (Next time, try a Big Mac!)
bsquirrel
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2 posted 06-02-2000 12:32 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Wow, Bal. That's almost as bad as that "battered" pun about cake and abusive relationships (I think Corazon wrote that one too).

Anyway, yo, Cor' (I admit, it's hard for me to think of a good nickname for you a la Buttefly Slippers or S'en), what's up? Your title alone hooked me, and then reading the contents kinda cinched it. Dry, sparse language with very bitter underpinnings. But a great poem nonetheless. Thanks for sharing it, and hope things look up for you soon.

Mike
Parker
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... the old black rum


3 posted 06-02-2000 11:03 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Corazon, great work here, says it like it is. You write great with strong emotion.

Parker
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4 posted 06-02-2000 03:40 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

I know this was one wierd, but from the comments I guess it reads effectively...sigh.....thanks all  
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