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~A Piece of You~

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SpitFire
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0 posted 06-01-2000 07:43 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire

~A Piece of You~

once I found the courage,
once I found the strength,
I took myself back,
I returned to where everything changed...
for you,...for me,...for us all.
It took some time,
it took rivers of tears
but I got there,
I took myself back,
to where your breath escaped you,
where mine turned a dark, dark gray,
but I got there,...in time.
I returned to where everything changed
for you,...for me,...for us all.
It took some time,
it took echoes of cries,
but I got there.
I took myself,
to where your heart slowly slipped
and mine swelled with pain,
but I got there.
And when I did,...I found something,
something that makes me so unexplainably happy
that I got back there...that I returned.
In a bush,...there was your baseball hat
blowing gently in the breeze...
still there,...from that night.
it's amazing it was still there...
it was blowing in the gentle wind,
in sort of a beckoning way.
Almost to get me to notice it there,
almost as if it were you...
making it dance so I'd see it...
I took myself back,..
I made it there...and there I found....
a piece of you.
This piece of you,...is a piece of me.
and I'm so glad that I returned
I'm so thankful to you for giving me the strength
to get back,...to close it this way.
To take this piece of you home.
I took myself back.......
and I took a piece of you back too.


*Missing You*


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Martie
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1 posted 06-01-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Wonderful--the baseball cap--a perfect touch!
Lone Wolf
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2 posted 06-01-2000 07:52 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Spit Fire,

So glad that you found the courage to return.  Without it, you would never have found the baseball hat or the closure that you seem so desperately to seek.  I am happy you were able to take yourself back in the process....a true gift indeed.  Great writing!  

Lone Wolf


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SpitFire
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3 posted 06-01-2000 07:53 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Thank you Martie for reading and replying.  This is true,..after the accident his hat somehow got stuck there in the bushes by the road,...and there it stayed for some time. Thanks again. *Peace.
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4 posted 06-02-2000 06:33 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SpitFire~
How poignant this piece.
*Hugs* to you for writing it
and sharing it with us.
~*Marge*~



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Kit McCallum
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5 posted 06-02-2000 07:52 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This was so touching SpitFire ... I'm so glad that you were able to retrieve something that allowed you such gentle closure. Wonderful and expressive writing.

Best wishes,
/Kit
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6 posted 06-02-2000 08:40 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Remarkable piece little spitfire.
Thankyou for sharing this with us, you finding the cap was meant to be and to help ease your pain.

much love and understanding sent your way.

HUGS TC


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RSEvans
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A very moving piece.  Good closure.  Thank you.
Severn
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This is amazing - love the style...and you have excellent imagery here.

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SF,
this is so perfect and well expressed.
wonderful and hearfelt writing.
I am moved by your words.
we heal our hearts as we write.
take care, jm

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that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

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The world calls a butterfly"
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~Butterflies are meant to be free~

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