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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-06-01 11:46 AM


If and When

If and when I lose you
what indeed will then be gone?
For memories will stay and stay
and in my heart … your song.

If and when I lose you
will I be old and gray?
Will I even know you’ve left,
and not even know the day?

If and when I lose you
will I grieve and be alone?
Or will I remember happy times
and see how our love had grown?

Will I remember your special look,
when you took my love?
Will I remember your special touch,
the one I’m dreaming of?

So if and when you leave me
know that in my heart
you’ve given me of your all
and in memory you’ll not depart.

1 June 2000
©KRJ




 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 2000-06-01 11:50 AM


Oh this is beautiful Sunshine... loved the last stanza the best. Well Done!  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)



Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-06-01 12:01 PM


Beautiful...
TerryW
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3 posted 2000-06-01 12:16 PM


Sunshine~
      (sniff)   Beautiful, dear!   It is so lovely that it brought a tear to my eye.   Bravo!



Love Ya~

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

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4 posted 2000-06-01 01:40 PM


Darkangel, PdV, Terry - thank you all.  Terry, don't get your keyboard wet...

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


ESP
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5 posted 2000-06-01 03:10 PM


This is a truly beautiful poem....absolutely wonderful!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Sunshine
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6 posted 2000-06-01 03:13 PM


Lizzie, your absolutely fills me with wonderful.  Thank you...

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


X Angel
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7 posted 2000-06-03 03:52 PM


Very nice I enjoyed this thoroughly...
~Heather

Lorraine Nisbet
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8 posted 2000-06-03 07:04 PM



Sunshine,

Beautiful...simply beautiful.

~Lorraine

 
A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


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9 posted 2000-06-03 07:51 PM


Karilea~
So tenderly done.

'For memories will stay and stay
and in my heart … your song.'

That's the kind of memory that
is always worth holding onto ...
one that fills your heart with song.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



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Aimster
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10 posted 2000-06-03 08:07 PM


Sunshine--

this piece filled my heart with happiness and made me smile. thank you. beautiful hon!

amy  

 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




PoetasterD
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11 posted 2000-06-03 08:40 PM


Sunshine,

This is a wonderful moving poem that truely inspires emotions (at least in me)! I like the entire work, but especially the first verse....

If and when I lose you
what indeed will then be gone?
For memories will stay and stay
and in my heart … your song.

And the ending is just as great! I look forward to reading more of your poetry.

Best wishes!

Poetaster D


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12 posted 2000-06-03 09:43 PM


Sunshine, this is such a touching poem.  Our memories are always ours to keep no matter what.  Well done.  
tracie66
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13 posted 2000-06-03 10:22 PM


Sunshine  
Shining through once more hon
touching, tender, beautiful, loving and much more  
This was a wonderful read thanks for posting for us.
Luv TC~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Tennessee Angel
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14 posted 2000-06-03 10:25 PM


Absolutely Breath-taking!
EagleOne
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15 posted 2000-06-03 10:31 PM


Wonderful work!

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16 posted 2000-06-03 10:33 PM


This is so lovely, Sunshine!  

Denise

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17 posted 2000-06-04 12:19 PM


Thank you, XAngel,...

Lorraine, I will accept your beautiful...

Marge, tender works for me...thanks!...

Amy, I'm so glad you're smiling...

PoetasterD...you can find my works just about anywhere, have fun...welcome to Passions...

Eloise, thank you...

Tracie...glad you liked, thanks!...

Tennessee, EagleOne, denise, thank you all very much...

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Lone Wolf
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18 posted 2000-06-04 01:54 PM


Sunshine,

Simply beautiful!!  The ending was just perfect....I loved it.  If we could all look at things this way, the world would be a better place.

Lone Wolf


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Angel
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19 posted 2000-06-04 02:04 PM


Sunshine~
This was so beautiful...I loved it  .

~Susie


 "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility."
~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood"


Sunshine
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20 posted 2000-06-04 04:29 PM


Lone Wolf, thank you...feel free to comment any time!...

Susie, thanks much for coming in...



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-04-2000).]

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