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Across the room..........
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Across the room.......... |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA 
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I watch you from across the room As you light your cigarette The blue smoke swirls In front of your chiseled features I know why you’re here The same reason you always come You ask me how my day was Making an effort at small talk To make it seem like you care I tell you about my day As you watch me with those eyes I can barely look at you As I ramble on about nothing My eyes catch a glimpse of you As you unfold from the chair And slowly walk over to me Stopping in front of me I look away and close my eyes I feel your hands rub my shoulders As you whisper to me How much you care I wonder why I let myself fall As you place a soft kiss on my neck I try to resist your sweet words And soft caresses every time But I’m not strong enough To turn you away Hoping one day you’ll stay And hold me close as Your heart pounds and your breath slows And you realize that you belong to me And I was made for you But I am always left alone Tangled in the sheets As I watch you leave |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Hey, nice writing here Very well done. There were some great lines in this well told novelette. I look forward to reading more of your work Liz |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Interesting work.  Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Rosepetals! I hope he wises up someday before it's too late. Denise |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this...reminded me of a married man that has to go back to his wife...who of course he doesn't love because he's messing around...but he enjoys the safety of his obligation to return to her and the luxury of an adventure. James |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Great poem.... Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Thank you for all being so nice. I wrote this poem a couple years ago. Since then I have woken up..and moved on. I realized it wasn't meant to be. That's ok though because I am much happier now. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Rosepetals, Glad to hear that happier times have found you. Liked your poem....so full of emotion and lonliness. Looking forward to more of your work!! Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RosePetals~ This was very well done. I enjoyed your thoughts. Glad you've moved ... but also glad you kept this memory of where you were. Thanks for sharing it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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