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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2000-05-31 08:40 PM


Note: This poem was written from a challenge about two years ago (a little less maybe). We had to use the phrase "tormented love triumphant hate". This is the second time I've posted it here.

Misspent youth with passions ebbing
lives lived in cold, hostile dread
lies shrouded in vows given
truth left hidden in words unsaid.

Cold passion in battles waged
while children became the prize
enduring pawns to warrior parents
not knowing which one to despise.

Years of agony and the battle raged
no victory for either side
peace will reign in the house of war
only when the combatants have died.

When did the line ‘tween love and hate
get so battered and so muddied
Who gave the signal to the battle join
who was first, beaten and bloodied.

Tormented love, triumphant hate
joined in wedlock profane
finding battles won or lost
in wretched delight, victorious pain.


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1 posted 2000-05-31 09:05 PM


A very powerful piece of writing, deVine one.The style used makes it alive with feeling. Beautiful work.....
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2 posted 2000-05-31 09:26 PM


Amazing, PdV...and heartwrenching at that.

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible


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3 posted 2000-05-31 09:42 PM


Thanks for reposting this one...hadn't seen it before.  So much truth to your words.  Wish I could say I couldn't relate, but that would not be true.  Great writing!!  

LW


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--Michael W. Smith

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4 posted 2000-05-31 10:11 PM


A challenge met beyond expectations I would think.  This is written with strength, power and pain...what a mix!  Thank you for sharing this with those of us who have not had not read this.
Denise
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5 posted 2000-05-31 10:32 PM


Excellent writing, Sharon, describing an all too common reality for many.

Denise

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6 posted 2000-05-31 10:46 PM


WOW....Sharon, Powerful writing in this. All too familiar with the message in it.

 All my love,
Jeffrey

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but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep



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7 posted 2000-05-31 11:16 PM


WOW Sharon this is indeed powerful and Excellent. loved it.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)



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8 posted 2000-06-01 12:15 PM


Excellent deVine... powerful and to the point. ..

Good job...

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--Victor Frankl


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9 posted 2000-06-01 12:18 PM


pdv pdv always good read to me
Skyfyre
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10 posted 2000-06-01 02:55 AM


... and again I am amazed.  This is the sort of thing that loses no power in repetition, but rather gains it.  Thank you for sharing this with us again ...

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


Nan
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11 posted 2000-06-01 07:08 AM


I remember this from the "blue page"... and I still enjoy it - It's a great work, PdV.. Thanks for the re-read..
Colin
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12 posted 2000-06-01 08:59 AM


I'm glad I noticed this one before it slipped down the pages! Powerful poem Sharon.
It's a shame that love, so often, has to end with "winners and losers" isn't it?

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13 posted 2000-06-01 09:35 AM


know the feeling well, you wrote it perfectly ...*sighs and applauds*
Poet deVine
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14 posted 2000-06-01 09:35 AM


Thank you all for your kind comments. You would be amazed at the different poems we had by using this phrase. Ron wrote an excellent one, btw. If he wasn't so busy, I'd ask him to post it.  
Danny Holloway
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15 posted 2000-06-01 10:58 AM


Received a "10" on my scorecard!
~nice writing~

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16 posted 2000-06-01 11:07 AM


Oh Glorious Ms deVine - this is such a terrific poem!  It says everything so well - you are a wonderful poet with the way you say things that are so glaringly obvious only AFTER you shed the light.  Simply wonderful.
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17 posted 2000-06-02 08:48 AM


Hi Miss, deVine,

Besides the fact that you met the challenge so perfectly you hit this subject so on the head and it is such a shame who ends up really being the victims here. Wonderful writting my dear.

Love, Cerenity

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