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Martie
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0 posted 05-31-2000 08:02 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Leaving
this catch of breath
and gem of laughter
squinted eyes pooled with pondering
a songís sigh.
Just toss this seeping hold
with your silver threads blown back
into the sun
as speed curls your grasp
of ticking time
where in dread of sleep
darkness folds and is forever.

Sharp surfaces of time
torn into minutes
fleeting as a blink
fall and echo with words,
such listening
holds you together
with memory

This shape believes
you with itís surface
still warm
and I touch the fold,
the crease that remembers
and sink into the curve of you.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-01-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
RainbowGirl
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1 posted 05-31-2000 08:14 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Memories are so incredibly powerful Martie...I often think "thank heavens I have them" but then sometimes, I wish I could wrap the blanket of emptiness, curl that soft pink fluff under my nose and leave the memories for the future...

Big HUSG sweetheart
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2 posted 06-01-2000 12:41 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Touching and beautifully done, Martie!

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 06-01-2000 12:57 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Martie,
A very warm and loving good bye to someone special so beautifully captured.
Check your e-mail in a few minutes
Liz
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4 posted 06-01-2000 01:07 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

what a true poet you are, m'friend!
well written verse, here!
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 06-01-2000 06:34 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie, my friend~
How tender the refrain that touches
a loved ones goodbye.  
I marvel at your words so tender.
Much love to you.
~*Marge*~



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Kit McCallum
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6 posted 06-01-2000 06:48 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Your words are exquisite Martie ... leaves me with such a warm and cozy feeling. Loved this!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Nan
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7 posted 06-01-2000 07:12 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I'm never disappointed when I open one of your wonderful poems, Martie.. This one is as wonderful as the rest..
Martie
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8 posted 06-01-2000 02:51 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Rainbow--Yes memories are wonderful and so is making them.  

Denise--thanks, sweet lady.

Liz--Thank you for reading and understanding.

doreen--what a nice thing to say..thank you!

Marge--much love right back at ya!

Kit--thanks so much for the exquisite.  I'm glad you like this.

Nan--I would never want to dissapoint you, and glad that I haven't.....yet.
ESP
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9 posted 06-01-2000 02:57 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

This is beautiful....simply divine.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
brian madden
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10 posted 06-02-2000 01:29 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Sharp surfaces of time
torn into minutes
fleeting as a blink
fall and echo with words,
such listening
holds you together
with memory

This shape believes
you with itís surface
still warm
and I touch the fold,
the crease that remembers
and sink into the curve of you


The last verse has an almost zen feel to it,
a feeling of total peace, for me anyway. Beautiful.
  

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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers

La Tristesse Durera (Scream to a Sigh)
"Life has been unfaithful And it all promised so so much
I am a relic I am just a petrified cry Wheeled out once a year, a cenotaph souvenir
The applause nails down my silence
La tristesse durera
Scream to a sigh, to a sigh
I see liberals I am just a fashion accessory
People send postcards
And they all hope I'm feeling well I retreat into self-pity, it's so easy Where they patronise my misery
La tristesse durera
Scream to a sigh, to a sigh
I sold my medal
It paid a bill
It sells at market stalls Parades Milan catwalks
The sadness will never go Will never go away
Baby it's here to stay

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