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This Day ......Kit's Challange

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Martie
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0 posted 05-31-2000 05:28 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I wrote this poem when I was seventeen...many years ago.

                This Day

On this day of years gone by
of many minutes passed,
the memory of a sunset gold
in memories will not last,
for sunsets are the symbol of
another day gone by,
and always those that bring new days
are first to meet the eye.

Minutes are for those who wait,
and those who let them pass,
with sixty seconds every one
until their days are done, at last.
This seems to me a useless task
for those who like to count,
for what are minutes in a life
thatís lived for no account.

When days go by I am not sad
for age is but the task,
of counting all the wisdoms learned
from moments in the past,
for life at last is all
that you would have it be,
and only those who know this fact
have truly lived, you see.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-31-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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1 posted 05-31-2000 07:12 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I was seventeen also once.  I was not able to write poetry like this however...

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2 posted 05-31-2000 07:17 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Martie this is fabulous...
what a cool and insighful poem, questioning and reasoning lifes view.
and I smiled noticing you rhymed back then,  (thinking of your last post)
this is so great to get to see all of these poems. take care, jm

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3 posted 05-31-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for Jana Tovey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jana Tovey

What a wise 17 year old you must have been.  This is such an elegant way of saying your life is what you make of it.  Great writing.
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4 posted 05-31-2000 09:02 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Martie, this was fabulous!  Challenge well met!  I really enjoyed this poem.  At 17, your insights were already so astute, and your poem had such depth ... I can see many of your same qualities continue to flourish in your other works I've read here.  

Thank you so much for digging deep and finding an early treasure!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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Did you mean to say when you were only 17 times smarter than the average human?? This is great, Martie. I was still writing about Dick and Jane at 17  
Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 05-31-2000 10:23 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This is so much fun reading everyone's first poem.Guess it's time to post mine.
This was wonderful Martie!
Liz
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7 posted 05-31-2000 11:12 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very impressive, Martie! This one is filled with wisdom well beyond that of most at that age, myself included.

Denise
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Thanks everyone...this was fun, but you know, if I was so wise at seventeen, how come I did so many stupid things? I was also cynical.

Another early one was:

Vacuous valves
of empty headed men
being turned on
spewed forth banana peels,
I slipped on one
and hurt my heart.
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9 posted 06-01-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Wow!!!! I also like the one in your reply...slipping on man's banana peel. Great answer to the challenge....I still think you are wise as anything and when you wrote this poem were wise as anything.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


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11 posted 04-05-2006 02:58 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

What an insight you had at seventeen.....and it has brought you far.

~sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

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