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~My Sister's Life~ Kit's Challenge for first Poetry

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 05-31-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


This is the first poem I recall writing.  I was 13 and in an English class, the assignment was to write a poem about something in your life or something in nature....most wrote of trees and birds etc.... I've been hooked ever since!

My Sister's Life

Violets are blue
Roses are red
The bruises are new
But the feelings are dead

She doesn't want to stay
He beats her still now
There's not much she can say
She opens her mouth and "Pow"!

You hear her screams
Both night and day
The sunlight beams
But for her the rain stays

The tears do fall
Down her face they come
She used to stand tall
Now she slouches some

She thinks no one cares
I hope to prove her wrong
All the pain she bears
And she still remains strong

Strong for her kids
Ages 13 to five
Anything he did
She appears to them just fine

For that they say
Thank you mom
We we hope someday
your seas will be calm

We can look at her and judge
Say what she should do
But she says it's her trench to trudge
Different maybe if it were you

They said "For better or worse" that day
and for her what's sacred is said
She doesn't want to run away
Now she must lie in her bed

I'll be here for her
When she calls I'll be there
She knows this I'm sure
She knows how much I care




 ~Butterflies are meant to be free~
(a gift from my S.S.)


© Copyright 2000 Butterflies_dont_cry - All Rights Reserved
TerryW
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1 posted 05-31-2000 03:26 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Holly~
     Dear, you have brought tears to my eyes.  You have always been a great poet, too!  I can imagine the scenes going on here.  It just goes to prove that even though you are young, you are not so naive to not recognize what goes on around you.  I know that your sister was very glad to have you around, to give her strength.  I am glad I have you around, too, dear!



Love Ya~

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
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2 posted 05-31-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~BDC~

you touched my heart with this one and the tears freely flowed
its apparent how much you love your sister, this you have showed
an excellent poet from day one, this is so apparent to see
an angel from the heavens, that's what you be

truly beautiful sweetie! take care.

love ya.
amy  
Janet Marie
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3 posted 05-31-2000 05:19 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

already an angel at 13...
very touching my SS...
these images from our childhoods stay with us always...
you know... i know...
me loves ya, jm

oh yes..i forgot to say
very ambitious rhyme scheme for 13 my dear!!
impressive.


 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

brian madden
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4 posted 05-31-2000 05:25 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

powerful, must admit I am getting abit misty eyed myself.
you were born a poet no doubt,
very clever verse.
Violets are blue
Roses are red
The bruises are new
But the feelings are dead

Through poetry we release our pain. peace and love.



 ------------------------
"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Will you accuse me as I hide Behind these layers of disguise And the mirrors of my own happiness.I've loved the freedom of being inside
Need a new start and a different time
Something grows in the space between me
And it's twisting and changing this fragile body" -Nicky Wire


Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 05-31-2000 05:33 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Terry~ Thank you, I was 13 and she was 28 at the time I don't think it was alot of comfort to know that I was there but I wanted to be for her. Adults judged her...I only loved her.

Amy~ **blushin** Yes I love my sister very much, she raised me for many years, till she had her own family...It hurt to watch her hurt. Thank you.

J.M.~ I know you know I know   thank you very much....I remember this poem taking 2 wks to get it "right"...lol and looking at it again I have an itch to re-do...but I don't think I will, it was a beginning...and I hope there's not an end for a VERY LONG time  

Brian~ Thank you very much, I'm just glad I somewhere to put the pain rather than hold it all in   a saving grace I think.



[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 05-31-2000).]
Kit McCallum
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6 posted 05-31-2000 09:12 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Oh Butterflies ... what a heart-wrenching poem put so beautifully and lovingly together by the tender age of 13.  That had such incredible emotions, it brought tears to my eyes also.

For those who write at such a young age, the therapy in writing is tremendous.  It must have been so difficult to watch your sister in this situation.  At an older age, I too watched my sister for many years in an awful relationship ... and penned many a poem for her.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us in the challenge, you were born a poet Butterflies.

Best wishes,
/Kit
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 05-31-2000 10:39 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Straight from the heart of a 13-year-old
How heartwrenching.
Just imagine moving us to tears at that tender age.
Liz
Butterflies_dont_cry
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8 posted 06-01-2000 08:01 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Kit* Thank you for posting this challenge It allowed a trip down memory lane that I don't often take.  There is so much healing in writing and sharing.  Thank you.

Elizabeth* Thank you, this situation brought me to tears many times, I'm amazed to read it with an adult eye and instantly I'm brought back to that time.  
angelsamongus
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~Butterfly's~
Your poem is so touching it really tugs at my heart.
Did the teacher talk to you about it? Or was it brushed under the rug? I am curious as to how your teacher handled such a seriuos subject.
Has your sweet sis ever seen this? I hope her life is better now.
~Blessings to you~
Lori
Butterflies_dont_cry
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Lori*
Thank you, and to answer your questions, I received a "C" on the assignment and was told it was a bit serious and perhaps I should try a lighter poem.....I showed my sister about 5 years ago and she didn't say much, she has a long history of seeking the "wrong" man and unfortunately her life is full of so much pain.  It kills me to know that all I can do is watch and pray that she allows me to help...but I'm afraid I will be eternally viewed as "the little sister" and not as a hand to reach to for help. Thank you once again for reading.
angelsamongus
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11 posted 06-01-2000 08:37 AM       View Profile for angelsamongus   Email angelsamongus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit angelsamongus's Home Page   View IP for angelsamongus

So sad. A time when a teacher could reach out and really touch a life and didn't, that angers me! I hope your sis finds peace in her life sometime..
You take care and you are a very special "'lil sis" to your "big sis" even if she hasn't told you so!
~Lori~
Butterflies_dont_cry
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12 posted 06-01-2000 08:25 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Lori* You're right it is sad, but so many people turned their heads that it was not a shock that my teacher did too.  Thank you for caring  
 
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