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Early Poetry...Kits Challenge to share

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 05-31-2000 01:48 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

These 3 were written in the early to mid-70's when I was in my teens 16-18
I started writing when I was 11-12,
but all my earlier work was lost --
in the too many moves to count after my parents divorce when I was 11.
Thanks to Kit for the smiles today, I had not read these in years.
here they are...teenage angst at its worst *smile*...
back then my pen name way "jay"(best friend nick-name)"Hey-J"


If you need me, all you have to do is ask --
its yours for the taking.
Our love ...  it's not much ...
but love is for the making,
and hearts ... well ...
hearts are for breaking ...
just look at mine.
--------------------"jay"

Too many people love --
they act like it comes for free.
Tonight I said I loved you,
but you didn't answer me ...
another heart spent.
-----------------------"jay"

~Men Only~

Men only come to women --
when its games they intend to play.

Men only say I love you --
when there's nothing else to say.

Men only say I want you --
when their needs get in the way.

Men only say I'm sorry --
when your price they wont pay.

Men only say good-bye --
when you really need them to stay.

"jay"
--------------------

SORRY guys(about that last one)
I was 18 and bitter...no offense...ya know I love the poets of passions.      




[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 06-01-2000).]
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Parker
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1 posted 05-31-2000 01:57 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

These are very honest Janet, we all wrote them back then.... well except me, I have none left. Though I remember a title...
St George and the Dragnet a comedy of the St George and the Dragon and based on a record I had by the same name. I don't know if it was ever funny. Wish I could dig up some old ones.... mostly still romantic if I remember correctly.... same old me or was the young me. lol
Butterflies_dont_cry
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2 posted 05-31-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

A broken heart way back then J.M. They do start early don't they...I can feel your attitude in the second one...I see a picture of a "woman" scorned....lol Hell Hath no Fury.....   Loved your early work just as I love it now S.S.!!
brian madden
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3 posted 05-31-2000 03:04 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

wow, Janet it is great to see one of your early poems. I see that your words have always been filled with honesty and powerful emotions. wonderful poem.
  

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"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Will you accuse me as I hide Behind these layers of disguise And the mirrors of my own happiness.I've loved the freedom of being inside
Need a new start and a different time
Something grows in the space between me
And it's twisting and changing this fragile body" -Nicky Wire


TerryW
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4 posted 05-31-2000 03:20 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Janet Marie~
     Well, I can see that you HAVE always been a great poet.  I love this insight into your early work!  I can remember having a very bad case of teenage angst, myself.  

Glad you shared these with us, dear~

Love Ya~

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
JamesMichael
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5 posted 05-31-2000 04:01 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Janet this is a nice honest reflection of the things you were going thru when you were a teenager.  Thanks for the look.   James
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6 posted 05-31-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Janet

ahhh ha!! so you have always been an excellent poet...i knew it lol. this was great hon to be able to look back at your earlier work...i guess i'll have to dig up some of mine (lord help us all) haha. thanks for sharing!!

take care.
amy  

 
"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

Martie
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7 posted 05-31-2000 06:02 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Love seeing these three looks at life from the younger you...very nice writing!
Kit McCallum
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8 posted 05-31-2000 07:07 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Yeah!!! Excellent Janet Marie!!!  This is the first poem response to the challenge I've read yet, and I see a few people must have dusted off the old diaries and books.  This is WONDERFUL.  It's so much fun seeing a little glimpse into the past.  I had a lot of fun looking back at soooooo much when we were packing up to move ...

Wonderful poems from "little Janet Marie" ... teengage poetry at it's best! (and by the way, whatever happened to Jay??? Do tell!)

Great challenge response ... any more???  

Best wishes,
/Kit


[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-31-2000).]
Marina
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9 posted 05-31-2000 09:01 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

When you were 18 in the 70's......Girl you are old!!!!!!  LOL
I couldn't resist! ( Gemini told me to do it! )

Marina
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10 posted 05-31-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Jeez, I thought it took a long time and a lot of experiences for gals to feel that way about men. I guess you all start a lot earlier than I thought!!


But I like the poems
Denise
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11 posted 06-01-2000 12:12 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

These are very good, Janet Marie! Thanks for sharing them!

Denise
Danny Holloway
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12 posted 06-01-2000 11:04 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Almost hurt Tonka's feelings there for a moment BEG.  You were pretty wise at 18, and a good writer.
Back to the top where you belong!
LngJhnAg
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13 posted 06-01-2000 11:10 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Janet marie - your words prove something - too often wisdom is falsely associated with age.  Your three works were wonderful.  All those years - and you are still 18 - terrific.
Marina
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14 posted 06-02-2000 11:53 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

I have to put this back on top.....for Gemini!
She is sooooo cool!!!

Marina
Danny Holloway
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15 posted 06-02-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Wish i could stay, but I really must go, being a man you know.....so, up you go.
hehe
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16 posted 06-02-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Janet~ and here I was feeling old turning 30 this November....HAHAHA  
These poems are great. But then I happen to really like all of yours! -SEA

           *BUMP*
jwesley
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17 posted 06-02-2000 06:22 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Wow, JM, you were wonderful even then.  When you were writing beautiful things I was writing stupid things...of course girls matured faster then boys (so they say).  But I never was one of those "men" you wrote about...hee, hee.

Never change, JM, your writing is beautiful.

jwesley
netswan
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18 posted 06-03-2000 05:31 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Wow JM - once a writer, always a writer.
I see you are expanding to "prose"
I think it is great.  Your teen poems
are great  -- Love them.   You keep on
writing -
I, too wish I had more of my poems when I was young. Most the ones I have now are stuck in my head, or probably forever gone.

BACK to the TOP
~netswan
 
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