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The First Minutes

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BSC
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0 posted 05-31-2000 11:39 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for BSC


Once cocooned in darkness,
Now forced into the light,
Until he feels his mother's touch,
He'll wage his mighty fight.
So clear the eyes of innocence,
Of this child, just minutes old,
The secrets behind them hiding,
Forgotten, dismissed, untold.
He has the look of an aged man,
With a furrowed, troubled brow,
Frowning almost as if he knows,
The struggles life will endow.
Tightly in a blanket wrapped,
Placed gently in her arms,
Contented sighs of comfort,
Protected from life's harms.


[This message has been edited by BSC (edited 05-31-2000).]
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1 posted 05-31-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Well done, BSC!
Jana Tovey
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2 posted 05-31-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for Jana Tovey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jana Tovey

You captured the wonder of a new parent very well in your poem.  Great descriptions of a newborn, too, the very details that induce us to protect our children (until they can better take the hurts in store for them, at least).
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3 posted 05-31-2000 12:34 PM       View Profile for angelsamongus   Email angelsamongus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit angelsamongus's Home Page   View IP for angelsamongus

~BSC~
you have captured this so beautifully.I really enjoyed reading your words.
~Lori
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4 posted 05-31-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

Dear Bonnie: I love remembering those first moments of each new baby! You put the whole experience into poetic beauty! Ellie

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5 posted 05-31-2000 06:16 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

This is SOOOOOO sweet!
I love it!
This is just perfect!

Did I mention I like this a lot!  
Well done BSC


 ~Sheri
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6 posted 06-01-2000 08:17 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

BSC~
What perfect joy !
I remember as though it were yesterday.
Wonderfully done, dear lady.
~*Marge*~


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7 posted 06-01-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~I love it!!!  This is a great piece...so true in wishing to shield them from life's struggles.....this was great..really. Thank you for posting it. *Peace.
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8 posted 11-27-2000 06:16 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Just bringing this back up to add it into my library (it didn't work when I tried to do so in Voices). Anyway I love this poem.

Elizabeth
 
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