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BSC
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0 posted 2000-05-31 11:39 AM



Once cocooned in darkness,
Now forced into the light,
Until he feels his mother's touch,
He'll wage his mighty fight.
So clear the eyes of innocence,
Of this child, just minutes old,
The secrets behind them hiding,
Forgotten, dismissed, untold.
He has the look of an aged man,
With a furrowed, troubled brow,
Frowning almost as if he knows,
The struggles life will endow.
Tightly in a blanket wrapped,
Placed gently in her arms,
Contented sighs of comfort,
Protected from life's harms.


[This message has been edited by BSC (edited 05-31-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-05-31 11:59 AM


Well done, BSC!
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2 posted 2000-05-31 12:14 PM


You captured the wonder of a new parent very well in your poem.  Great descriptions of a newborn, too, the very details that induce us to protect our children (until they can better take the hurts in store for them, at least).
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3 posted 2000-05-31 12:34 PM


~BSC~
you have captured this so beautifully.I really enjoyed reading your words.
~Lori

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4 posted 2000-05-31 06:11 PM


Dear Bonnie: I love remembering those first moments of each new baby! You put the whole experience into poetic beauty! Ellie

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5 posted 2000-05-31 06:16 PM


This is SOOOOOO sweet!
I love it!
This is just perfect!

Did I mention I like this a lot!  
Well done BSC


 ~Sheri

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6 posted 2000-06-01 08:17 PM


BSC~
What perfect joy !
I remember as though it were yesterday.
Wonderfully done, dear lady.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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7 posted 2000-06-01 09:07 PM


~I love it!!!  This is a great piece...so true in wishing to shield them from life's struggles.....this was great..really. Thank you for posting it. *Peace.
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8 posted 2000-11-27 06:16 PM


Just bringing this back up to add it into my library (it didn't work when I tried to do so in Voices). Anyway I love this poem.

Elizabeth

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