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Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
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Charlotte, NC

0 posted 2000-05-31 11:12 AM


This is a poem written by my best friend. This is her first poem she's ever written. I told her about Passions and how great all of you are. She is a little bit shy...however would love some feedback to this piece. Thanks guys. It's much appreciated!!

Love,
Amy

P.S. She is thinking of joining the forum!  

The Moment
By:  Laura M. Wells

My dreams are only fantasies where you and i reside
I never want to leave your side
But my dreams are only fleeting moments in time
Is our love for one another a crime?
You give me cool days and hot nights
You are the only one in my sight, in my fantasies of the night
You gave me sheer bliss, in the moment where your lips met mine and you gave me a kiss
but my feelings for you i must hide, i am no longer afraid of you leaving my side
but like i said these are only fantasies in the fleeting moments of time
Now i must awake and go back to reality



 
"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."


© Copyright 2000 Amy Kennedy - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-05-31 11:45 AM


Laura, What are you waiting for, this one is beautiful, COME SOON TO THIS PLACE....

Amy, thanks for posting this poem for Laura,

Regards, sudhir

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-05-31 03:32 PM


My dreams are only fantasies where you and i reside
I never want to leave your side
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perfect!!
very impressive first poem Laura... and the emotions are very well expressed
yes, keep writing and come join the PASSION of Passions. *smile*
take care,
you too amy-girl
later gator-girls

 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


vandana
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since 1999-10-22
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3 posted 2000-06-25 06:24 PM


Hope she joins the passions!!!!! Nice written!!!!!
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