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My first poem (response to Kits challenge)

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killer222
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Unfortunately poetry was not really touched upon in my school  . I did not take an interest in poetry until I was 16. This is the first poem I ever wrote


Past hope

Everything is quiet
No sounds can be heard
A sign on the door in front of me
Says please do not disturb

I turn the handle slowly
The atmosphere is dead
And as I look inside I see
A old man in a bed

Slowly walking through the door
I take a look around
I see no movement from the bed
Just a letter on the ground

I pick it up and read it
I feel a tear in my eye
It tells a story of despair
By a man who wants to die

The world is such an evil place
It gets worse every day
A place so full of pain and woe
No one wants to stay

The old man in the bed has gone
He is finally at rest
A man who took a look at life
And thought suicide was best

1994


 "shun the frumious Bandersnatch!"
Killer222 :)

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Poet deVine
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1 posted 05-31-2000 09:56 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Why was your first poem about suicide?
killer222
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My exam results were not what I had hoped and home life wasn't good. I kept my emotions deep down and I needed to get them out in the open. That is the main reason I started writing

 "shun the frumious Bandersnatch!"
Killer222 :)

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 05-31-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

What a heart-wrenching response to the "first/early poem challenge".  

You appear to have allowed yourself to get out your emotions at such a young age. It is such a blessing, being able to write and think through your feelings. Your title "Past Hope", makes me believe that since this was your first poem about 6 years ago, that you were able to win your battles and "found" hope.  I'm so glad you did ... keep writing ... you have a talent!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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4 posted 05-31-2000 09:53 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

A very good first poem...poetry, or almost any writing, does wonders for the soul...this is very painful and well-expressed. Thanks for sharing, Killer.

Elizabeth


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An amazing first poem, you dug deep into your soul and penned it with acute pain and feeling.  I know writing helped carry me out of the darkness many times and I hope it does the same for you.  Thank you for sharing this.
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