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Loves Me Not

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Corinne
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0 posted 05-30-2000 10:21 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corinne

Loves Me Not

The pull of responsibility,
The call to be with the others,
You say that you would be with me,
If you had your druthers.

Some time doled, meted out,
Figured into your to-do list,
Leaves me thinking this romance,
To you might not be missed.

You can pencil me in on Friday,
Even though tentatively,
Youíll confirm by Thursday,
If acceptable to me.

It is not, Iíll tell you now,
This is not how love is done,
Demonstrating by actions,
Is priority number one.

So, if you happen to call tonight,
And donít find me at home,
I found something better to do
Even if I do it alone.

I shouldnít have to tell you this,
Itís really a very bad sign,
Youíve lived and loved long enough
To know this by design.

If you want to be with me,
Youíll have to do better than this,
Or youíll see the backside of me,
I'm the one you didn't miss.

© 2000 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-30-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for epoet   Email epoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for epoet

wondering if this poem was written about a very bad relationship. seems like you are very bitter and angry at the gentleman who broke your heart and I understand why, just doesn't seem like this would ease the pain of someone like you.


 P. J. Kotrch
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A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love

Corinne
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2 posted 05-30-2000 11:22 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Epoet, but things are not always as they seem.  Sometimes a poem just writes itself without being based in reality.

Corinne
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3 posted 05-30-2000 11:34 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Corinne - I can fully understand the part-time lover aspect of this poem - it was a neat slant, looking at it from the recipient's viewpoint - Just one little question - Does this poem really mean what I think it means???  Do dirty old men hafta become your part-time lovers to see your backside??? Please RSVP, as I'm sure that the rascally scalawag Toerag is anxiously awaiting your response (as opposed to virtuous Long John and gentlemanly Balladeer).
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Very blunt and honest, I hate the now norm that seem to be between people. its always I'll see if I have an opening on my schedule.
Though I like your attitude here, do you really think mooning someone is going to help.  

parker

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5 posted 05-31-2000 11:35 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

love the response rofg@mooning, but really, I know what you mean, you are either number one or not...and you either accept it or not...like your attitude here girl, good for you, great writing  
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6 posted 05-31-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for Jana Tovey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jana Tovey

This is good advice to someone who needs to hear it...if they could fit a reading into their busy routine, that is.  Well written, I like the way you spell it all out so effortlessly.
Corinne
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Thanks, LongJohn, you can see my backside anytime you want, and Toe, who knows where Toe goes?

Parker, you are too funny!  I hadn't meant it that way, but you see the irony!  LOL

Thanks, friend.

Thank you, Jana and Corazon, sometimes the mood to write out old angst takes hold, I know negative poetry isn't a popular thing to do...

Corinne

Corinne

[This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 05-31-2000).]
JamesMichael
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8 posted 05-31-2000 05:41 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I like the message here...if someone truly likes you or loves you they will make time for you even with a busy schedule.  Sometimes the truth is they are too busy with someone else or maybe not as interested as we would like to believe.    James
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9 posted 05-31-2000 08:40 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corinne~
Got me chuckling with this one.
I don't see 'negative' at all ...
I see affirmative action !

'So, if you happen to call tonight,
And donít find me at home,
I found something better to do
Even if I do it alone.'

LOVE IT !
~*Marge*~


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10 posted 05-31-2000 11:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is wonderful, Corinne! I also loved the lines 'I found something better to do
       Even if I do it alone.'

'Alone' can be infinitely better than taking 'scraps' from someone's precious schedule. It's their loss for sure.

Denise
Corinne
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Thank you, Marge, Denise and James!

Not my usual style, guess I'm kind of uncomfortable with it.

Corinne
Parker
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Love Me Do..... name that tune.

Well, certain women here, no names... focused
on the lines....

I found something better to do
Even if I do it alone.

now why is that, and you must remember men are very visual, so keep those thoughts clean ladies...... Oh, the madness.
 
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