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rachL
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since 2000-05-27
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0 posted 2000-05-29 07:09 PM


I am but one of many.
I am not special, nor was I ever in his deceiving eyes.
I have been used.
My emotions have been tossed in a blender and set on high.
Love does not hurt, but it creates a burning pain in my heart
I was not the only one in his eyes.
I try and try again for our love to return. Instead, I find that I have been used for lust, and neglected.
I am vulnerable, alone, and manipulated
My feelings are but a nuance in his eyes
I trusted him, I loved him, I lost him.
His hands. His comforting, loving hands. Why must they dig upon my heart and upon my soul?
My eyes pink with tears, his, dull, seldom expressing feeling.
I inflict this pain upon myself. I trusted the enemy. I handed him a map to my heart.
Love does not die. It remains alive, breathing a poisonous toxin so that I will never forget.

-Rachel

within the year i have loved and hurt due to an individual. my wound has recently been reopened. i am quite young and it has inspired me to write and express my feelings. this is my second poem and i am looking for feedback, possibly advice. thanks for your time.

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Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
1 posted 2000-05-29 07:37 PM


Rachl

welcome to passions! this was an excellent piece of poetry...so sad and full of heart. i really felt this piece! very expressive and quite emotional..you write very well! i am so sorry you have had to experience this kind of pain...unfortunately i too can relate to it   I am only 23 and don't have that much experience in life or love myself...but i will impart this with you. it's what my mom use to tell me...sometimes things in life happen for a reason...and at the time they make no sense and life seems so cruel...but later as time passes we began to make some sense out of the craziness. writing has at least been for me my salvation and what gets me through my darker hours. i wish you much luck and love on your journey of healing over this loss.

take care!
amy  

 
"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."


CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

2 posted 2000-05-29 08:38 PM


Rachel, the emotions expressed in these verses you've shared have transcended thru the screen and touch upon hearts that too have been in a familiar place like you.  This poem captures the every essence of a love gone estray and its simply great!

Coco

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