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Female beauty commodity.with Janet Marie.

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brian madden
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0 posted 05-29-2000 04:51 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian madden

Femininity is beautiful, no higher commodity to be possessed.
I am a painted petal of desire, display my skin as a fashion accessory.
Shackled to your arm in slavery, paraded as objectified beauty.
I would protest were not my mouth sewn shut,
and my body drained of strength on a diet of Evian.

No, my queen, you judge me harsh, I worship you,
it 'tis I who is chained to your grace, bound by your beauty.
I place you on a pedestal and bow before you,
all around you pales in comparison to your essence.
I treasure you, I offer myself to you on bended knee,
I am your slave, you are my Goddess of Splendor.

You speak as though I am a queen, crowned
with diamonds and jewels of your affection,
when I am the snarling lapdog, a trophy to straddle
and defile. You buy my services with expense junk
serenade my innocence with empty promises.
I am so worthless, numbed that I please your shallow desire
so I can at least feel disgust, vomit upon this pornographic skin.

Your words of defilement distress me and are unjust,
what must I do to prove myself, to make you deem me worthy.
Have I not erected monuments to honor your perfection,
must I pay you tribute at your feet, wrap you in spun gold.
Your every desire I wish to fulfill for only the gift of your company,
forgive my vanity and pride, I am but a man whose eyes were born to see you.
I have bestowed many pleasures upon you, still you deny me,
it is not my sin to display you, to showcase your beauty ...
one so exquisite must be viewed in the proper light.

Am I ungrateful, callous and venomous to your love?
When I gaze in your coal eyes I see only reflections
of greed and lust, these monuments you erect stone, marble and skin
fail to seal the void inside. Sculpted face of desire,
you hunger for my treasures that are temporary.
Only your stone icons serve your diseased obsession,
But they shall be eroded by times parasitic kiss,
crumbling into dust sharing the same fate the tomb of our love.
Slowly I choke under your Barbie doll regime,
caked with make up, skin tainted in foul stench of perfume,
A heavenly perfection in anorexic, still won't be your lover.

Your words of naivety, jaded amuse me,
you want for nothing, for what do you lack.
I have dressed you in tapestries of envy,
sculptors with scalpels have perfected what was not.
You should be more grateful, more gracious,
there are lines forming to take your place ...
Carbon copy clones with assembly line breasts,
all licking their painted on smiles to walk on your runway.
With but a wave of my hand you could cease to exist.
there is no demand for a beauty queen stripped of her crown.

I am disposable then, replace me.
Why twist me to your own needs
when you can get these dolls tailor made?
You have given me nothing of value,
Ice diamonds share all the warmth of your heart.
Shower me with rose petals, wilting as my spirit vanishes.
These halls of marble where you hang my image
are Hell to me. My reflection taunts me,
I look at myself and I am empty.
If you love me truly then kill me,
and kiss away my misery.

"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"
Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Do not listen to a word I say
Just listen to what I can keep silent"

Nicky Wire

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Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 05-29-2000 05:03 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Oh my, What does one say to this, except maybe it's
You two are something else, captivating me so to read this over and over. You should do this more often. It seems maybe two heads are better than one, although each of you is a true artist with words.
You're tops!
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2 posted 05-29-2000 05:05 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven


This is just incredible Brian and Janet!!

Speaks to the fact that we as men (and to some extent, women) have taken the gentle beauty of femininity and cloaked it in the guise of what "society" thinks must be a standard that all women must conform to or die.

We make monuments to the "outer beauty" of women hoping to attract their attention but in reality, we do nothing but to help perpetuate the myth.

I have always believed that the true beauty of a woman comes from the inside.  I have known many women who were not considered "beautiful" by the standards of the world, but who were just as beautiful as anyone that you would see on the "runways" and "magazine covers".  

Ok, stepping down. . . this was just a really great poem!!  BRAVO!!!


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--Victor Frankl

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3 posted 05-29-2000 07:43 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Thanks for this lovely and truthful poem.  James
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4 posted 05-29-2000 08:37 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

You two make a great combination.  Wonderful writing!  Pssssst,Brian.......( whispering in his ear......just keep your eye on that Gemini girl; she's a bad one!!!!)

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5 posted 05-29-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I am impressed! This is great! I really enjoyed reading make a good team..
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6 posted 05-30-2000 08:00 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thank you all for such rave reviews *smile*

this was a bit of an experiment and challenge for me...
which is why I adore writing with Brian as he teaches me new ways to look at things...
He suggested we try a gender role reversal and look at this subject thru the eyes of the other side.
Thanks Bri...for making me reach and try for new things...
and must be rubbing off on me...
did ya notice I didnt rhyme 1 time!!!LOL
maybe when writing from the male perspective ...
I dont need to have rhyme OR reason LOL JUST KIDDING!!
brian madden
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7 posted 05-30-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

thank you guys for all your wonderful comments. It was an interesting experiment,
and Janet handled the challenge of seeing from a man's point of view perfectly. I think my advice might have helped. I told to imagine being a seven year old boy who likes the ladies alot, basically from a teenager  up. lol.  I did notice that you didn't rhyme with that one, ow give us credit janet we do have reason but loss it in front of beautiful women.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Will you accuse me as I hide Behind these layers of disguise And the mirrors of my own happiness.I've loved the freedom of being inside
Need a new start and a different time
Something grows in the space between me
And it's twisting and changing this fragile body" -Nicky Wire

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8 posted 05-30-2000 06:13 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Fabulous, bravo to the two of you...thoughtful and deep....
Great Job!!!
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