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Eternal love - the promise
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Eternal love - the promise |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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This poem is inspired by shilpi's Union 4 Eternity. A lot of thanks are due to shilpi for lending me inspiration to write these 14 lines... I really don't know where they came from. They occurred while I was reading the poem, while my mind was also busy with another one that I was writing. Hoe to post that soon...please enjoy this one: Eternal Love - the promise -------------------------- Fate held a key to this door, A slit, an opening, the key hole. This door, opened up a new frontier, One eye blinked looked through the eye-hole, Waited patiently for another, Another eye soon stared, caressed a fluttering soul. Though the eyes had met, yet nothing was said, Love's emotions flowed, streams joined forming a river, Silent expressions, sweet impressions, a raid, A foray into hearts, joining them, a momentary shiver, Two hearts held on tight, in love, souls become one, The birds whispered wonderful songs, devoted to one another, Songs flourished, music enthralled, paradise regained forever, That this love is eternal, would last forever, is a promise given.... Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
Sudhir, I am truly tongue tied.....emotions run deep and words are few.....The words are so good, actually triggered that special feeling in my heart.....You r the best !! I hope to read so many more of your poems, you are indeed gifted !! Best wishes and love shilpi |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Shilpi, I am presently connected to the net from Cloud #9. Your lovely words have pushed me way up there.... feeling a bit frivolous, a touch gloated with amassed ego... Thanks for reading, I am still gloating.... tongue-tied eh?  Thanks again, Regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I read this a few times Sudhir ... eloquently penned and utterly romantic. Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, this is excellent my friend. . .you have done well with this one. . . It strange where our inspiration can come from isn't it? -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sudhir... to borrow a word you grace so many of my poems with... this is BRILLIANT!! exceptional thoughts and words. and inspiration born from another poets words is one of the sweetest gifts of poetry. take care, jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, Thanks for first reading this over and over, and then for posting such a wonderful reply. Thank you. Sven, If you say this is excellent, I better believe it. Thanks for the praise showered upon me. It is best if a poet's inspiration come from the works of another, don't you think so? I believe so! Thanks for reading, sven. My day is made... Janet, BRILLIANT is it so? Thanks and many more due to shilpi then for provoking me to write this by a wonderful poem...Thank you Janet, and you take care too. Regards to one and all, Sudhir |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir, I was the other pair of eyes, and now I think I'm in love with you. See what you do? Your writing is magnificent, and I am your greatest fan Liz |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Once again your pen has expressed Magic! Poems, especially those that come from only God knows where...are always the best. Magic, Sudhir...magic! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hallucinations, Karilea, make people live in an imaginary world, seeing things that otherwise doesnot appear to be seen... Magic is just one of those optical illusions...I am glad, these 14 lines caused that effect... Thanks for reading this.. Liz, Is it true, Is it true that the eye from the other side of the door were yours, oh! how beautiful it appeared, I could lose myself in the depth of those eyes.... THANK YOU for your kind words, greatest fan, eh? WOW one of the very best of compliments I have ever received except my mother says "Sudhir, you were never naughty in your early ages, look at all these babies, they cry a lot, scream a lot, you were so cool, so mature" and yet I regret crying for today many a year later, I recount my child hood and miss doing a few things then... Regards and thanks once again, Sudhir P.S. by the way, I am working on huge poem, which I wish to post before the end of this day... it is appearing to be strange so far... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sudhir~ most beautiful piece I must say. The ones that come from nowhere are often the best and you have written something very amazing in this. Special Sudhir, very special. Luv tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Tracie, Thanks for reading and posting your supporting words. I am happy that you found this special... Regards, sudhir. Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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