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Seek Not My Heart

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Kit McCallum
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0 posted 05-29-2000 09:38 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kit McCallum

Seek Not My Heart

Oh gentle winds 'neath moonlit skies,
Do not you hear my heartfelt cries?

Below the branches, here about,
Do not you sense my fear and doubt?
Side glistening rivers, sparkling streams,
Do not you hear my woeful screams?

Upon the meadows, touched with dew,
Do not you see my hearts a'skew?
Beneath the thousand twinkling stars,
Do not you feel my jagged scars?

Seek not my mournful heart kind breeze,
For you'll not find it 'mongst these trees.

It's scattered 'cross the moonlit skies,
Accompanied by heartfelt sighs.
It's drifting o're the gentle rain,
A symbol of my silent pain.

It's buried 'neath the meadow fair,
Conjoined with all the sorrow there.
It's lost among the stars this night,
Too far to ease my quiet fright.

No gentle winds, seek not my heart,
For simply ... it has torn apart.

/Kit McCallum


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angelsamongus
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1 posted 05-29-2000 09:49 AM       View Profile for angelsamongus   Email angelsamongus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit angelsamongus's Home Page   View IP for angelsamongus

~Kit~
Your poem speaks to me. I know this all too well.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
It's scattered 'cross the moonlit skies,
Accompanied by heartfelt sighs.
It's drifting o're the gentle rain,
A symbol of my silent pain.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~Blessings~
Lori

Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 05-29-2000 10:01 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Kit,
This is a beautifully rendered piece, full of vivid images...

Seek not my mournful heart kind breeze,
For you'll not find it 'mongst these trees.
...
No gentle winds, seek not my heart,
For simply ... it has torn apart.

---

Regards, sudhir.

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
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~Lori:  Thank you for the blessings ...

~Sudhir:  Appreciated as always kind sir ...

With much appreciation,
/Kit
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Kit~
Simply the loveliest haunting render
from a heart so tender.
Enjoyed so much.
~*Marge*~


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this was simply lovely!

 Kathleen
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Beki
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6 posted 05-29-2000 03:30 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Beautifully haunting...last two lines a perfect end t o these lovely bittersweet images. Very nice poem!
ellie LeJeune
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7 posted 05-29-2000 03:51 PM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

Kit; How heart rending, sad, and said with lyrical splendor. Ellie

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~Marge:  Thank you for the kind words Marge ... tender but still, tormented sneaks out at times.

~Kathleen:  Thank you for the kind words.

~Beki:  It's strange how you can write poetry "backwards" sometimes ... the last two lines were what started me off ... thanks Beki.

~Ellie:  What lovely comments, thank you so much Ellie.

With much appreciation,
/Kit
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9 posted 05-29-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Touchingly sad and lovely poem, Kit!
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Touching and beautiful...my heart reaches out to you...may you feel Gods love and compassion and mercy.  James
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Oh Kit, what talent you are blessed with upon reading these verses you write such expression is breath-taking.

Coco
Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 05-29-2000 08:55 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Love it!
One of my favorites!
Wonderful, Kit

From your poetic twin
Liz
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Wow! Kit this is wonderful! I read in your other post that you've written more in the few weeks that you've been here than in the months previously. If this is a sample.. write on!!!
Nan
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This is absolutely wonderful... I'm sooooo glad you're here on the forums with us now...
Kit McCallum
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~Martie:  Thanks so much Martie.

~James:  Dear, sweet James, thank you.

~Coco:  Thank you for the lovely response Coco.

~Liz:  Thank you for the wonderful response, my poetic twin ... our paths have crossed yet again eh?  I'll have to check my signature line  

~Poet deVine: I find such inspiration here Poet deVine ... everyone is so wonderful. Thank you for the encouragement. (Have I Thanked You Yet Today?)

~Nan: You'll be tired of me saying this Nan ... but thank you again. Had I not had such a warm response from you that first day, I fear I'd still be reading and writing from a'far.  Thanks Nan.

Warmest thanks and appreciation to all,
/Kit
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~Oh Kit,...I've read this now a couple of times and am sure I'll read it again.  Wow,...it's really a wonderful piece of work...truly a delight to read.  It's message and the text used flow in such a way that it's like liquid....I love it. *Peace.
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17 posted 05-30-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

very very nice kit i enjoyed it to no end i did
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Kit,

Absolutely lovely, absolutely.

lorraine

 
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Irie
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I'm impressed!
What an artistic expression!  
Painfully Beautful Kit
Keep up the good work!
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Kit,

This one really hit home for me.  You have summed up my feelings perfectly here.  Very expressive and powerful writing.  Always looking forward to reading more of your work.  

LW


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....simply lovely....
You have captured it all.  Marcy
Kit McCallum
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~Spitfire:  What a wonderful comment!  Thank you Spitfire!

~Wayoutwalt:  Glad you enjoyed it kind sir, kind sir!

~Lorraine:  Thank you so much Lorraine!

~Irie:  Thank you for the lovely comment Irie!

~LoneWolf:  As I look forward to yours, thanks LoneWolf!

~Marcy:  Thank you for the kind words Marcy!

With much appreciation to all,
/Kit
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Kit~
A very touching poem, it's imagery fantastic and very heartfelt.
Luv Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe


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