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Crumbling

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Lost Dreamer
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since 06-20-99
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Normal, Illinois


0 posted 05-29-2000 09:28 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Crumbling

Crumbling
to pieces
like a fallen
cinder block
dropped
from ten feet up
in the lost atmosphere
laughing
at the ground
as each minute particle
breaks
into thousands
of sniveling voices forged.

Have you
not seen
the mischievous lord of play
creeping,
crawling
through shapeless dark images
within
happy people
left out to dry in backyards.

He plots
he twists
he mangles
those minds to shreds
blustering clouds
fledge overhead
milking thunder
as lightening
screamingly
threatens to undermine all.

See
my name shudder
as written in the clouds eye
tomorrow
may be a day
full of happiness and love
but today is
my nightmare
of despair and sadness blaring.
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Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
Posts 7206
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


1 posted 05-29-2000 09:39 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Looks like a pretty grim situation, quite dark, and challenging, tempting me to add, but I try to stay calm and hope to give my complete moral support and well-wishes to you. GET UP, and let your spirits soar....

A fine piece of poetic work, I must add, but methinks its time for you to celebrate life...

Regards, sudhir...


 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall
Denise
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2 posted 05-30-2000 09:51 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent expression, Gloria. Sometimes hope in a brighter tomorrow is the only thing that keeps us going through the darkness of the present circumstances. So hold fast to that hope, always!

Love ya
Denise
Parker
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since 01-06-2000
Posts 3135
... the old black rum


3 posted 05-30-2000 01:44 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Gloria, this is one powerful poem. I haven't read much of you late... sorry... I see I'm missing out on some fantastic stuff.
Bravo....

Parker
Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 05-31-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Sudhir: Thanks for your kindness, it was just a tough day, but my spirits are back and soaring.  

Denise: Thank you so very much, you are a wonderful friend that I cherish deeply.  

Parker: You've blown me away with your reply, thank you so very much.  
Jana Tovey
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since 05-30-2000
Posts 257
USA


5 posted 05-31-2000 09:23 AM       View Profile for Jana Tovey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jana Tovey

There are some really great analogies here.  The cinder block dropped...the sniveling voices.  Days like this are few and far between, I hope.  It helps to put them into perspective in a poem, though.  Great writing.
Denise
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6 posted 06-01-2000 12:39 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ditto, Gloria!  

Denise
 
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