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eyesplus2
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0 posted 2000-05-29 02:39 AM


A heart beats strong and true
  more powerful than the strongest hurt
yet able to be broken with a single look


A touch giving warmth and joy
yet able to be cold and aloof


A smile able to stop the saddest tears
yet the lack of one
able to crush all life from you


A word giving all meaning to two becoming one
The lack of words cutting all the way to the bone


A heart beats all for you
I want to touch you for ever and a day more
I smile whenever I see you in my heart
  The words I say will let me become one with you..I Love you today,  tomorrow, and yesterday......



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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-05-29 07:44 AM


Lovely poem EyesPlus. I enjoyed the way you created the "hot" and "cold" mix of feelings.  Nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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2 posted 2000-05-29 06:22 PM


Eyes+2~
'A heart beats all for you
I want to touch you forever and a day more'

My sentiments - EXACTLY !
~*Marge*~



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brian madden
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3 posted 2000-05-29 06:55 PM


A smile able to stop the saddest tears
yet the lack of one
able to crush all life from you


A word giving all meaning to two becoming one
The lack of words cutting all the way to the bone


loved those images. I enjoyed your poem wonderful constrast of emotions.



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CocoBaci
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4 posted 2000-05-29 08:34 PM


Simply exquisite the verse that captured me was ~ A word giving all meaning to two becoming one The lack of words cutting all the way to the bone ~  
Eyes, I enjoyed this very much!

Coco

Corinne
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5 posted 2000-05-29 08:41 PM


Liked the contrasts here.

Corinne

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