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~ If Only Trees Could Hear ~
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~ If Only Trees Could Hear ~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ If Only Trees Could Hear ~  Through forest thick she walked alone noises all around her - Her path was lit by moonbeam only fear, it did surround her. She knew that she was being watched kept looking o'er her shoulder - Wishing she would stumble onto someone who would hold her... She'd lost her way & wandered far deep into this place - Cold and damp and so alone terror on her face. Her feet were bare, her dress now torn her hair a matted mess - So many evils all around her in this wilderness... Her tear-stained face so hollow now her faith & hope were gone - She'd wandered now for near a year where did she belong? So tired now, she found a place there upon the ground - To rest her weary body & to dream without a sound... Her breath it came in shallow gasps was this where she would die? Out here alone in forest thick where none would hear her cry? Her eyes they closed, a final time releasing one last tear - A final breath, she finally drew If only trees could hear... If only trees could hear... If only... -poetFemmeFatale May 28, 2000 "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW< !signature--> All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 05-29-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Gen, if only people could hear like the trees do. . . This was a great poem, and I really liked the idea of the trees being able to hear our cries. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I so enjoy your work PoetFemme ... the imagery and story transfixed me, wonderful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful, Gen. I could see her walking in the woods..lovely as usual!!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this...very touching and yet sad to feel all alone in this world...may your journey lead you to someone who will hold you. James |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
femme.... enchanting you are with this one, sad and lovely, and mistical it is.... Parker |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Simply incredible how one captures the walk thru the forrest dark. Your poem is most captivating in all its verse.  Coco |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A wonderful tale....so sadly lovely and captivating! Well done! |
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jeffbrowning New Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 7Mobile, AL, USA |
Painted beautifully before my minds'eye. What to be inside your head? |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hi ya, lil Femme - neato poem - it makes me want to go into the forest and find women who are all alone, lost and scared (veg) |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
What's this with your poems ending in death lately!? Eeeek! =) Very nice poem though. Sometimes you learn things by getting lost though ya know? [delete] [delete] [delete] [delete] [delete] [insert usual bablings here] Loved it. --Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
A haunting poem, especially the last lines. Indeed, maybe trees can hear, but they just can't respond (in our frequency, anyway). |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
i come to the web to get inspired to write..at the end i end up reading and not writing. I come in touch with some old friends too...uhum!!!...Femme why haven't you written back to me? YOur poetry is beautiful and will always be a "pick me up" for me. love ya. miriam coronado |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
And in the quiet and the still, One wandered slowly to her side. He found her lying there so still And feared that she had died. He touched her lips with his own His fondness for her clear And her eyes opened to gaze upon The one who held her so dear. **can't stand such a bleak ending...perhaps I"m too sentimental, non? Viva L'amor mon chere...viva l'amor. Knowlege tempered by wisdom...Wisdom tamed by youth. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I want to say a big thank you to each and every one of you who continue to uplift me with your words of encouragement. I know my poetry of late is taking many different turns and twists, not only in style but content. Since January, I've really been doing alot of soul-researching, and am finally growing to love and appreciate myself, so that someone else can too. I have found many uniquely wonderful paths inside my heart. Thank you for tolerating me as I explore my own depths. Love, death, passion, and dispair...all are vital. I love each and every one of you! Hope to be around more soon! Brother Robert - - Thank you for that lovely "uplifting" ending...actually, it's quite befitting for the real circumstances behind this poem.  He did hold her in the end...and she didn't die. Miss you!"Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Wow, I know, a woods can be frightening at night, so lonely yet it seems like there is someone watching your every move. a very haunting piece, vivid. It gets my thumbs up, enjoyed it alot. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers La Tristesse Durera (Scream to a Sigh) "Life has been unfaithful And it all promised so so much I am a relic I am just a petrified cry Wheeled out once a year, a cenotaph souvenir The applause nails down my silence La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I see liberals I am just a fashion accessory People send postcards And they all hope I'm feeling well I retreat into self-pity, it's so easy Where they patronise my misery La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I sold my medal It paid a bill It sells at market stalls Parades Milan catwalks The sadness will never go Will never go away Baby it's here to stay |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Back to the top this one goes! What a beautiful piece pFF. Reread this one a couple of times. |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
PFF you know that I go looking for your poems now. I am drawn to your wonderful style and flow, and subject matter. Lovely work. Linda M. |
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