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I Seek You, Kamla

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Balladeer
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0 posted 05-28-2000 09:41 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


I've cherished that New Zealander with all my heart and soul.
To win her heart has always been to me a worthy goal
And now at last through stroke of fate it's easy to pursue her
Since Kamla has decided to become an ICQer!

I've filled her mailbox with up to twenty notes at once
Then settled back impatiently with hopes of some response
But, through some small malfunction, I could never get through to her
But all those days are over now 'cause she's an ICQer!

Now, every time she comes on-line, I see it at a glance
And seize the moment to show her I'm ready for romance.
Oh, what a great device for me to spot my girl and woo her
Since Kamla has been kind enough to be an ICQer!

No more waiting for responses from across the sea.
We can carry conversations instantaneously!
I've got New Zealand on my lap. My hands are getting bolder
And she can't even know that I am 35 years older.

My life is now complete. A rainbow spans my sunny sky.
Thanks to this great technology, a lucky man am I.
So here's to you, Severny one. No words are spoken truer
My world is now a better place since you're an ICQer!!!
© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 05-28-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This will sure get Kamla's attention. Can't wait for her feisty little retort.
(Liked the poem)
Liz
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2 posted 05-28-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

hey Deer,This is terrific!  I'm sure she'll love it.

I'm with you Elizabeth, can't wait for her reply.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


John Yaws
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3 posted 05-28-2000 11:04 PM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Wal, pilgrim I tell yuh, uhuh. I don't see how the lil lady can resit that un, uhuh.  )
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4 posted 05-28-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Me likes this much, and funny little twist on the title too!  The whole thing is sweetly creative sir!  You did well!     She'll just pass out, I'm sure!  LOL  
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5 posted 05-28-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

hehehe yuh i am gonna hafta hit that cutey up too and great poem balladeer i been in the less than crazy writin mood and yuh pumped a bit o blood type O (as in O great) into me yuh yuh
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6 posted 05-28-2000 11:46 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Too sweet .... I'm sure Kami's gonna love this ....  


[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 05-28-2000).]
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7 posted 05-28-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very clever writing, Balladeer! Delightful, too, I'm sure she'll love it!

Denise
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8 posted 05-29-2000 05:56 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

The Severny One steps idly in...'You called?' she says nonchantly, hair blowing in a swift NZ breeze...'Sorry, I've just been running through some hills...skirts are a bit wet you know....cough cough...might get consumption...but obviously my 'deer has come to rescue me...I'll be fine, what with a nice strong man to look after me...'

The Severny One pauses...

'What's that - you're 35 YEARS OLDER THAN ME?! All this time! I swear I never knew...Oh I'm going to faint! I must compose some FREEverse'

Ahem...

I have travelled
  far and wide
    through American lands
  and Australian
and English too

yet I have
  never left
    my native soil
  and from them all
I found my 'deer

a source of wit
  and insanity
    beyond compare
  at last I thought
this restless heart

has found her man

But OH!
The horror
and the shock!

35 years
I whisper
broken

I shake my head:
everything said
it all is true

My 'deer
is but a marauder
and a wooer
of hapless women

and I among them

Ah sorrow!
(a dramatic phase)

My 'deer, my 'deer
I must leave you far behind
invisible you on ICQ
Ah yes

I seek YOU
Oh man of younger blood!

(P.S - just quietly 'deer: Have I convinced 'em? Let's go run off to some hills shall we?)

LOLLOL...thankyou 'deer one...you made me smile on an otherwise unsmiley day - so big hugs. You are a treasure...and I shall continue to plague you with the wisdom of the Severny One as soon as my exams are over.  

  Love K



[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 05-29-2000).]
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Well Soul-Sis, what a wonderful poetic reply we have here.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


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10 posted 05-29-2000 09:35 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

michael, did anybody ever tell you that you're a DOM?

severn... your response was a kick! LOL
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11 posted 05-29-2000 12:22 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

That's my sweet Kamla
More charming than ever
So poised and positioned
To weather whatever

A snake charming beauty
With a tongue that's too keen
For a cobra's sharp fangs
That were left on the scene

Stay sweet, my love
Liz
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12 posted 05-29-2000 12:22 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Hey, Kamla!!! I have younger blood. I just had a transfusion last week! Ah, well. I see that I have let the cat out of the bag. I shall cancel my supply of Geritol and Energy Bars. Any, if we don't meet on ICQ you can always see me in ICU!!

Loved your poem, NooZee!!  

doreen...Why sure! I've been called a Defender Of Manhood many times!!!
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ahhh but you have the secret weapon for only the Irish know that it's not the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow, it's the fountain of youth!!!!!!

 Kathleen
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14 posted 05-29-2000 05:46 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
This was delightful and VERY creatively clever.
You're still da' man !

Kammie~
A very cute reply.
~*Marge*~


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15 posted 05-29-2000 07:25 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Why Lizzzzzzy - you're not...you're not calling our 'deer a SNAKE are you?

I am sure he has been called that many times have you not oh 'deer?

(chortle chortle)


Look 'deer, provided you still manage to turn up with that private jet at some point I may just make a concession...hmmm, yes, it would have to be a FAST one - don't want no skanky, creaky, leaky thing. TOP class ok? AND if you provide me with a round the world trip to see the seveRn wonders of the world...that has definite potential for me to relent on the whole 35 year thing...(actually - I think it is more like 30 you know).

Whaddya say boyo?

  K

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Geesh, deer.... there ya go... sweet-talkin' all the girls.... Save some up fer me, OK???
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17 posted 05-30-2000 09:08 AM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

in my best SP voice:

"we are not amused" ... ~sulk~ (apologies to HRH or Mrs T .. forget which ..heh heh)

gone are those sweet exclusive days in dreamy MSN
when love was slow and easy
and free from worldly men!!

ohhhh Lady K what HAVE you done??

Come back ~sob~

in desolation ..... SP  

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18 posted 05-30-2000 01:30 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Oh, 'Deer - you're a master of half truths!

I've got New Zealand on my lap. My hands are getting bolder,
And she can't even know that I am 35 years older.


To which I must add (for poor lil broken-hearted Kammie's sake)

Tis true OLD 'Deer needs a shot,
Or two from Youth's sweet fountains.
Cuz he's 35 years older
Than the Appalacian Mountains!


'Deer - great poem, and that lil Kammie's retort is a real hoot, too!  All of the crazies in here definitely keep me feeling great.
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19 posted 05-30-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

'Deer!  Come read this poem I wrote ya, ya no-bell loriette!
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20 posted 05-30-2000 11:42 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Kamla, I'm sorry but I would prefer a girl who wants me for my charm, grace, good looks, intelligence and deep humility instead of my Lear jet, diamond collection, great wealth and fantastic imagination.

OK, you old barnacle squeezer, I read your microscopic attempt at wit. For your information, the Appalations and I were born the same year! Now, if you had said Rockies, you might have been closer to the truth....you can insult me all you want. I'm just so happy to see you back I'll take it with a smile. Once this euphoria wears off, however, I'm coming after your skinny little derriere  
 
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