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Mike
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0 posted 2000-05-28 01:03 AM



I often in my garden pray,
When comes the night, and gone the day,
In solitude; alone, by self,
Forgotten vase on dusty shelf.

Imploring God, to set me free,
Lift my blinders, so I can see,
Will I ever live a life,
Ever be a loving wife?

My father left when I was born,
Raised by Momma, threadbare and worn,
No friendships made, nor games to play,
No time for fun, would Momma say.

Was seventeen when came the stroke,
Upon us both, life's cruel, cruel joke,
An invalid, and I her nurse,
Both confined, to God we curse.

Am thirty-three, and Momma's dead,
I found her here, as lay in bed,
With mourners few, is laid to rest,
A single rose, upon her breast.

I sit alone in still of night,
and feel the pain of sorrow's bite,
In solitude; alone, by self,
Forgotten vase, on dusty shelf.

© Copyright 2000 Mike - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-05-28 01:20 AM


Mike~
So moving - so gentle is this piece.

I'm caught in a sigh - of remembered goodbye.

The 'forgotten vase upon dusty shelf'
holds a little bit of self.

When tender is the night -
my tears are touched to fall.
Thank you for this stirring reminder
of one I lost.
~*Marge*~


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Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 2000-05-28 01:25 AM


A sad poem, but not the end of the world, only the beginning of a new life. Time to dust off the vase and let its true beauty be seen. A very different theme, and well presented as usual
Liz

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2000-05-28 09:49 AM


You words were very fluid in this piece Mike ... beautifully written,

Best wishes,
/Kit

Meadowmuse
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4 posted 2000-05-28 09:54 AM


This tale is beautifully told and written with the empathy of a truly compassionate soul. Wonderful, Mike.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-05-28 10:54 AM


Mike, I was entranced by the story. Perfectly done, my friend.  
Martie
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6 posted 2000-05-28 11:11 AM


Mike, this is such an empathetic look into another's soul and you display your own tender heart in the rendering...Exceptional, as always, my friend.
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