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Destroyed Utopia

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Rhavin
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0 posted 05-27-2000 06:42 PM       View Profile for Rhavin   Email Rhavin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rhavin

Our utopia that ended in lies
That is why my soul cries
Your grace that enchanted me from the start
Is now what sends pains of agony to my heart
I still long for you to give me a loving touch
Yet the hate I feel is stronger if not by much
The confusion of feelings twist my soul
The spot in my chest that love stems from is now a dark hole
How much longer can this torment last
Love and hate flow from this loss of love gash
I'm not sure if I can emotionally survive
But with the loss of my soulmate I don't want to be alive

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doreen peri
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1 posted 05-27-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

you've expressed well the torn & tormented emotional state a person experiences when losing a love... good thing it's temporary... people are very resilient and... there are hundreds of thousands of potential 'soulmates'

welcome to passions! I'll look forward to reading more
SpitFire
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2 posted 05-28-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Oh,...ouch.  This one is so full of pain. I'm sorry.  Great expression of emotions though. *Hang in there. *Peace.
JamesMichael
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3 posted 05-28-2000 04:12 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"I still long for you to give me a loving touch."  You have expressed the sorrow of love very well.  James
David2
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4 posted 05-29-2000 05:48 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Rhavin,
    I feel for you if this is indeed a personal statement. Youd words are ful of distraught emotion.
                     David2
Kit McCallum
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5 posted 05-29-2000 05:51 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

You've expressed yourself well in this Rhavin ... take heart that there will be brighter days ahead.  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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6 posted 05-29-2000 05:53 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

It always hurts to lose the one you love, but if this person is your soulmate, they will be back.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
 
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