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The Perfect Girl

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Rhavin
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0 posted 05-27-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for Rhavin   Email Rhavin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rhavin

"For Benna"

I’ve never thought I would meet the perfect girl
But God has brought her into my world
When she smiles at me my soul melts inside
Just for the chance to be near her I would die
I can tell when I look at her, she is such a unique spirit
When she speaks to me I can hardly bear it
Because I’m nothing special, and I can’t compare
But to dream about her, would I even dare

I’ve always heard about a girl that one might meet
The one that can make your heart instantly skip a beat
I always thought that this tale was nonsense
But I now know its true because the time that we’ve spent
Now when I close my eyes I see her enchanting face
The taste of her lips on mine is what I ask for when I pray
I count down the minutes till I can be in her company again
But I know how easily she can turn the heads of all the men
So what can I do to set myself apart
I guess I can show her that I have a very loving heart

I’ve often been told that God has made a special someone for each
But when I look at her she seems so far out of reach
I don’t know how to make an impression on her that will last
I want her to like me for me, so I won’t wear a mask
I know that God has someone for me
Now I think I have found her, but does she share the feeling
Or am I just wishing for the impossible
But this feeling inside is definitely unstoppable
“God to this I pray to you”
“Please let her feel the same way too”

© Copyright 2000 Rhavin - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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1 posted 05-27-2000 04:50 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

You have said it all so well...I hope all your prayers and desires come true.  James
SpitFire
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2 posted 05-27-2000 06:16 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~This is so precious and sweet.  I too hope that all your prayers are answered my friend.  Great post. *Peace.
Aimster
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3 posted 05-27-2000 09:21 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Hi! Welcome to Passions! Hope you like it here.   This was a beautiful poem full of your heart! Those are my favorite kind. I hope this girl you speak of realizes how you feel! Best of luck!!

take care,
Amy

 
"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

Kit McCallum
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4 posted 05-28-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Wonderful and emotion-filled Rhavin ... I hope the recipient of your desire reciprocates.  She would be lucky indeed to meet your heart.  Welcome to Passions!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Lorraine Nisbet
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Hi, Rhavin!

Such a sweet poem...Great job...Welcome to Passions.

~Lorraine
    

 
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6 posted 05-28-2000 04:12 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Welcome Rhavin. . .

This poem was excellent!!  A wonderful song showing your poetic soul. . . if it hasn't been shown to the object of your affection. . . make sure that she sees it!!!

Excellent. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Rhavin
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7 posted 05-29-2000 04:13 PM       View Profile for Rhavin   Email Rhavin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rhavin

thanks everyone for the nice comments.  And Sven I am scared to show it to the girl I wrote it about.  I truly don't know if she feels the same way.  
 
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