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bsquirrel
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0 posted 05-27-2000 12:55 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

In memorium:
the light from the lantern in the trench
reflecting the bars and the boys and the men.
the pale sky of smoke, the pale ground of dirt
and mud.
hearts shot right out, minds left in grass,
futures fall to heavy barraged death.
wounded and crippled, guns dropped at side
spattered with blood.
the light shakes as treads
impact the ground.
nursed flame in glass
wavers, goes out.
ears and sight gone.
things go to hell.

those silent rows of stones and trees and cut-back weeds.
the stories that will never be told, except crying on knees.
fingering the engravings with young fingers full
of meaning.

your breath and hearts beating
can still be heard
in the whipping flag cast strong in the wind:
trailing red against the white sun,
the blue empty sky.

this is to all those who have died.

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brian madden
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1 posted 05-27-2000 06:20 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

wow a powerful poem, in the end I don't think war resolves anything and been from Ireland which has a very violent history I still believe in pacifism. That said I really enjoyerd your poem.

"those silent rows of stones and trees and cut-back weeds.
the stories that will never be told, except crying on knees.
fingering the engravings with young fingers full
of meaning".

your poem reminded me, well mainly the title of another poem about war.

Song Of Those Who Died In Vain (Primo Levi [1919 - 1987])

Sit down and bargain
All you like grizzled old foxes
We'll wall you up in a splendid palace
With food, wine, good beds and a good fire
Provided that you discuss, negotiate
For our and your children's lives
May all the wisedom of the universe
Converge to bless your minds
And guide you in the maze
But outside in the cold we will be waiting for you
The army of those who died in vain
We of the Marne, of Montecassino
Treblinka, Dresden and Hiroshima
And with us will be
The leprous and the people with trachoma
The disappeared ones of Buenos Aires
Dead Cambodians and dying Ethiopians
The Prague negotiatiors
The bled dry of Calcutta
The innocents slaughtered in Bologna
Heaven help you if you come out disagreeing
You'll be clutched tight in our embrace
We are invincible because we are the conquered
Invulnerable because already dead
We laugh at your missiles
Sit down and bargain
Until your tongues are dry
If the havoc and the shame continue
We'll drown you in our putrefaction

Primo Levi
14th January 1985




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2 posted 05-27-2000 08:09 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

brian,
Thanks for your reply. I agree that war is unfortunate. My question is, in the world we live in, can we stop the fighting? I don't think so. Instead of looking to a future that flies against the face of human nature, I'd rather be happy with what we have -- as imperfect as it is -- and try to honor those who died, whether or not they believed in war themselves.

Also, thanks for sharing that poem with me. I appreciate it.

Mike
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thank you for your true heart words of remembering those that we've lost. in my heart i hold them all strong and
i just love your whole poem. it's really rare that poeple dare to write of things that are real and scary, and plain of life, still intense but with true meaning, even for a words point of view. I will spare the change to the drunken few who have trugged and lost what they new.
kindly,
redheart angrybraids
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 05-28-2000 09:30 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This was a poignant remembrance of the horrors and hollowness of war Mike, well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit
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Excellent writing, Mike...I could see it, hear it, feel it, smell it...and yes, to honor those who have died, it is, indeed, our unfortunate priviledge.

Claire

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those silent rows of stones and trees and cut-back weeds.
the stories that will never be told, except crying on knees.
fingering the engravings with young fingers full
of meaning.

your breath and hearts beating
can still be heard
in the whipping flag cast strong in the wind:
trailing red against the white sun,
the blue empty sky.

this is to all those who have died.

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mike, i will behave myself in this reply and just tell you this poem effected me deeply,
and I greatly admire the poet who wrote it
take care cool squirrel
bs/jm

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They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
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The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


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7 posted 05-28-2000 03:02 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike~
My heart salutes this piece.
The ravages of war have taken those
who relentlessly fought it's battles.

I'm usually reminded of Billy Ray Cyrus'
hit song with the phrase ...
'All Gave Some ... Some Gave All'

Honor to all ...
Thank you for this poignant piece on this day set aside for remembering.
~*Marge*~


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Thanks all, for reading and remembering.

Mike
 
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