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Stone Cold

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 05-27-2000 12:06 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

emotion trapped
locked inside,
keeping time
to madman's sighs...
Not today--
forget tomorrow--
cries within
this slab of sorrow---
weary, still she fears the horror
(ah to sleep, her last reprieve...)
terrified that she might dream
and shatter night with memory's scream.

But let it take
what it might take--
reveal the art beneath the stone.
He walks on shards
of marble chips
at last to taste
her chiseled lips
angry that her kiss is cold
accusing fate that's his alone--
cursing hands that wrought this stone.
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Sven
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1 posted 05-27-2000 11:44 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Very powerful serenity. . .

Sometimes, it seems that there's nothing underneath the stone. . . unless you take out that chisel. . . .

Excellent my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

brian madden
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2 posted 05-27-2000 01:04 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

He walks on shards
of marble chips
at last to taste
her chiseled lips
angry that her kiss is cold
accusing fate that's his alone--
cursing hands that wrought this stone


wow powerful stuff serenity, very dark and moody, a great read.


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X Angel
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3 posted 05-27-2000 02:14 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

ooooh I thought this was really neat  
great job!
~H
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4 posted 05-28-2000 02:03 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

serenity, the right lips can turn that stone to molten lava.
Very deep poem, loved it.

Parker....... xxxxx
Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 05-28-2000 05:55 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Powerful, it is ...

It takes a scuptor to carve out whats inside a stone...

The coldness of the stone is due to the matter inside, the strangled emtions and the hidden rage, and ...

This is a very interesting read, serenity...
regards, sudhir.

 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
Kit McCallum
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6 posted 05-28-2000 07:10 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

So true, and such a powerfully drawn comparison Serenity ... the shape within a sculpture is created by what the artist has "taken away" in chippings. What is left of "us" when someone chips away too deeply ... you've shown this so well, excellent read and thought-provoking!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Lorraine Nisbet
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7 posted 05-28-2000 08:30 AM       View Profile for Lorraine Nisbet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lorraine Nisbet


serenity,

Great read...great job.

~Lorraine

 
A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur

Janet Marie
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8 posted 05-28-2000 12:44 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Not today--
forget tomorrow--
cries within
this slab of sorrow---
weary, still she fears the horror
(ah to sleep, her last reprieve...)
terrified that she might dream
and shatter night with memory's scream.
But let it take
what it might take--
reveal the art beneath the stone.
He walks on shards
of marble chips
at last to taste
her chiseled lips
angry that her kiss is cold
accusing fate that's his alone--
cursing hands that wrought this stone.
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WOW...this is EXCELLENT girl...
very cool and very deep...
amazing imagery
a poet and a sculpter..you are so talented me sweet  
later twin gator
jm

serenity blaze
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9 posted 05-28-2000 12:48 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Sven-------thanx Sveetie--"let it take what
           it might take"--hugs m'friend.

brian------thank you, noticed that you're a
           bit of a philosopher yerself...

X Angel----thank you as well and btw, "sub
           rosa" is a favorite motto of mine-
           being "keeper of secrets", y'know?

Parker-----GOOD ANSWER--warmed my heart...

Suhir------much gratitude for your thoughtful
           reply--tho there is much subtlety
           in transformation, yes?

Kit--------thnks to you for understanding

Lorraine---gratitude to you as well for your
           kind attention.

now--thanks to you all again--I'm now off in
search of a grinder--seems I've got this chip on my shoulder--serenity exits grinning.
 
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