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hoppy
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0 posted 2000-05-27 12:03 PM



To hear the waves crashing at your feet
And see the breeze blow your hair aside.
To reveal the delecate perfection beneith,
For the sun to softly caress your silhouette
As I hold you carefully with mine own eyes .
I pray one day you'll take a second glance;
Maybe then the story will be complete,
So we can finish our first last dance

 There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

"Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."

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1 posted 2000-05-27 07:09 PM


This poem is written well enough to receive recognition for some very nice images. Nice work, hoppy.
doreen peri
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2 posted 2000-05-27 07:17 PM


"so we can finish our first last dance"

love the juxaposition of the 'first last'...
several other effective lines in here... enjoyed! thanks

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