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Night Hunter

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Lily121
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0 posted 05-26-2000 05:19 PM       View Profile for Lily121   Email Lily121   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lily121

*Night Hunter*

Shadow light in
dappled wood
shining eyes blue and clear,
glinting in an angry mood.
Watching, waiting, evermore shall he
stay in frozen stare.

Fur so soft
and eyes so quick
creature stays in distant dark
long white fangs
claws very sharp
creature is a hunter, lurker, of the night.
Watching, waiting, evermore shall
he stay in frozen stare.

Moonlight filter through trembling leaves
hunter stalks his nighttime prey.
Soft footsteps on forest floor
travel evermore
searching for your one heart's desire.
Watching, waiting, evermore shall he
stay in frozen stare.

Slow low song on moonlit bank,
hunter stops and sits down.
You look at me
with frozen stare.
What am I to you, a mortal but,
when you of the animals,
of the lurkers,
are immortal?
Watching, waiting, evermore shall you
stay in frozen stare.

Hunter, lurker, of the dark
you are the mysterious mists of a
moonlit night.
Why do you seek me,
King of the wood,
for a sweet soul to love?
Surely there are more tigresses far more beautiful than I.
So why? Why? Why do you seek my heart to love?


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Meadowmuse
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1 posted 05-26-2000 10:44 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"Shadow light in
dappled wood"

"Soft footsteps on forest floor
travel evermore"

This piece issues forth a quiet mystery with phrases like this...very descriptive!

~ Claire



 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


doreen peri
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2 posted 05-26-2000 11:08 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

"Watching, waiting, evermore shall
he stay in frozen stare."

the repetition of these lines and then the haunting lines stuck in the middle that say,

"You look at me
with frozen stare"...

are so very effective... i got a lot out of this piece..  
Lily121
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3 posted 05-27-2000 07:09 AM       View Profile for Lily121   Email Lily121   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lily121

Wow. Glad you liked it. I really can't believe that I wrote something this mysterious yesterday at school. Thanx for the support.
brian madden
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4 posted 05-27-2000 07:27 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

yes quite haunting and beautiful.
really enjoyed reading it had an enchanted feeling about it.

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"Do not listen to a word I say
Just listen to what I can keep silent"

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5 posted 05-27-2000 07:45 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lily~
Some really haunting phrases
tucked in here.
I'm reminded of 'the night is a lonely hunter' ...
Nicely done.
~*Marge*~


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