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jeffbrowning
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since 2000-05-25
Posts 7
Mobile, AL, USA

0 posted 2000-05-25 01:33 PM


Dreams

There is a place inside the soul
Where waking minds dare not go
For fear of finding out the truth
Exposing basic, lifes' bare roots
Too much to comprehend

Carnal knowledge pulled aside
Showing how we feel inside
Primal fear, joy sublime
Interpreted to confuse
What really do we have to lose
By giving up the right to choose
Allow direction from desire

Images not understood
Things seeming bad, things seeming good
Things seeming what we'd hope to be
Never meaning what we see

Why, then so much attention paid
Ponderings the days away
Thinking places, we can't stay
Harboring moors, drifting away
Safety not held fast

This special place where demons dwell
Knights save the day from dragons' swell
And kindred spirits soaring high
Hand in hand how friendships fly
Pow'rd by love that's undenied
Power, powered, power to fly?

Appearing from where we do not know
Fear of things we dare not show
Feel it, no, we dare not go
Hold it, no, and watch life go
Water comes from up above
Cover up our heads from love
Grounded from the sky, a shame
To touch our hearts, came to blame
Deny the past, to care again

Control our minds to some extent
Denial our sublime intent
To mature, a way to vent
Holding on to time well spent
Only time for understood content

Give in to childish fantasy
This place grows, now more we see
And come to know what's meant to be
From our own self, the future we
Held out for all the world to see

A place we never understand
Somehow guiding by the hand
Hold on to all, as all may seem
Played out in splendor in our dreams



© Copyright 2000 Jeffrey E. Browning - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
1 posted 2000-05-25 03:22 PM


To live each day with the innocence of a child would be wonderful, alas I am too cynical but I do try. A wonderful poem,
really enjoyed it. Welcome to Passions  

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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto



netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
2 posted 2000-05-25 03:58 PM


Welcome to Passions, Jeff Browning!

Lovely rhymetic poem with some sage advice.

~netswan

Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
3 posted 2000-05-25 06:59 PM


Very nice work, Jeff... Welcome to Passions - Check your email for a special greeting..
Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
4 posted 2000-05-25 07:23 PM


Welcome to Passions Jeff.
Such deep thought and truth here!

"There is a place inside the soul
Where waking minds dare not go
For fear of finding out the truth
Exposing basic, lifes' bare roots
Too much to comprehend"

This stanza alone says so much!

Well Done, I enjoyed!  


A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
5 posted 2000-05-25 10:39 PM


WELCOME JEFF!

Wouldn't it be nice if we could  have  a device  that could interput  our dreams...but then the mystery and imagination would be gone! nice  poem!

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-05-26 01:59 AM


Carnal knowledge pulled aside
Showing how we feel inside
Primal fear, joy sublime
Interpreted to confuse
What really do we have to lose
By giving up the right to choose
Allow direction from desire

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EXCELLENT WRITING HERE!!!
very cool and deep poem...
welcome from me as well jeff...
you make a perfect first impression with this one... I look forward to more of your
work,
take care, jm

 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~



jeffbrowning
New Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 7
Mobile, AL, USA
7 posted 2000-05-26 08:48 AM


Thank you all for such a warm reception.  It is a great thing to know understanding personally.  Nice to meet you all!  

I look forward to reading your works!


mark crawford
Junior Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 11

8 posted 2000-05-26 09:23 AM


Hi Jeff,

This is a difficult poem to follow but I think in that respect it mirrors our dreams. I especially like your thought to allow direction from our desire. To me it means to act on our intuition, as difficult as that may be sometimes. I think you could improve this poem by working on the syntax a little. Keep up the good work. Mark

Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
9 posted 2000-05-26 03:02 PM


"There is a place inside the soul
Where waking minds dare not go"

I loved your opening lines Jeff ... they caught me from the start!  Wonderful poem and welcome to Passions!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Rosebud1229
Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
10 posted 2000-05-27 12:52 PM


welcome Jeff, I really enjoyed your poem, I know exactly what your saying. Sometimes our dreams do really say alot about us. Or should I say our unconcious mind that we sometimes try to push aside.

 

Holly
Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127
Arkansas
11 posted 2000-05-27 01:00 AM


Jeff-
WELCOME! I'm new too..and these folks here are wonderful to respond, you'll love 'em! Not to mention, just look around and read some and you will know you are in great company here.  
I love your poem. I believe strongly in dreams being your inner voice that we all stiffle while awake. I really enjoyed this work...very nice!
-Holly


 I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of.
Michel de Montaigne

lucky
Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
12 posted 2000-05-27 02:45 AM


Nice dubut my friend... welcome to Passions. If you write like this your going to rock people right out of their chairs.



 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley)

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