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Falling Awake (Revisited)

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Meadowmuse
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Falling Awake


Soft shadows on the window's sill
as daylight's drawn a ragged breath
Low calling of the whippoorwill
first signs of spring amidst scents of death

Finely fragrant, as dogwood teases
the moistened morning's vision
Succintly savors and somehow sees
o'er the nearing apparition

Draw nigh, come forth lost labouring soul,
encumber not Perdition
Unburden the sallow, ponderous load
swelling full with each confession

Lilt lightly upward, newly borne,
all grace and tenderness bestowing
Embrace the cockcrow, the sudden morn...
your Freedom's come with Knowing


Dear LadyClaire



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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 05-25-2000 09:12 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This is lovely Claire ... and I enjoyed how you entitled this verse.  Nice work!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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Wow, you certainly have a flow with your words Claire!

Awesome!

K
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3 posted 05-25-2000 09:32 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

flow??? I was white water rafting all the way through it!!!
great job

 Kathleen
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Oh My, this is excellent, beautifully written.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


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5 posted 05-25-2000 10:28 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Meadow,
Excellent poem, loved the title.
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beautiful Claire

Rex
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7 posted 05-25-2000 12:18 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Claire, this is breathtaking, full of hope and has such a gentle peacefulness about it. Very well written!

Denise
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8 posted 05-25-2000 06:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Claire--Such a possitive, sensitive and remarkable poem.  Wonderful!
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9 posted 05-25-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Superb Claire,
              one can feel the touch of new day and the promises that it brings with these words. . .

Wonderful. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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Claire,
   Nice poem, great use of words. I love it when poets take advantage of the rich well of words available to them. I enjoyed this.
                  David2
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You pen equally with splendor of the dawn as of the night.  First signs of spring harken thee to exquisite beauty my friend.
Meadowmuse
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   Kit, Severn, Kathleen, Dark Angel, Seymour, Rex, Denise, Martie, Sven, David, and Mike...thank you, in earnest, for reading this and responding with such lovely and encouraging returns.
   Today has been my birthday and I have been also preparing to move to the new (old!) house, so I have just now  been able to connect online, only to find these delightful and generous remarks from each of you.
   I am so glad that you found something to enjoy in this piece and I thank you for letting me know.  

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


doreen peri
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you are a classic poet, claire

this verse will stand the test of time... make sure you back it up and print it out in case your computer crashes... LOL

it's superb lyric!
Meadowmuse
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Doreen, thank you for such a kind response! What a lovely thing to say to a poet! So glad you enjoyed this piece, and I do thank you for letting me know.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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Lilt lightly upward, newly borne,
all grace and tenderness bestowing
Embrace the cockcrow, the sudden morn...
your Freedom's come with Knowing

a fantastic poem, beautiful images and I love the title "falling awake."

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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Do not listen to a word I say
Just listen to what I can keep silent"

Nicky Wire

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