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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2000-05-25 09:07 AM




Falling Awake


Soft shadows on the window's sill
as daylight's drawn a ragged breath
Low calling of the whippoorwill
first signs of spring amidst scents of death

Finely fragrant, as dogwood teases
the moistened morning's vision
Succintly savors and somehow sees
o'er the nearing apparition

Draw nigh, come forth lost labouring soul,
encumber not Perdition
Unburden the sallow, ponderous load
swelling full with each confession

Lilt lightly upward, newly borne,
all grace and tenderness bestowing
Embrace the cockcrow, the sudden morn...
your Freedom's come with Knowing


Dear LadyClaire




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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-05-25 09:12 AM


This is lovely Claire ... and I enjoyed how you entitled this verse.  Nice work!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Severn
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2 posted 2000-05-25 09:18 AM


Wow, you certainly have a flow with your words Claire!

Awesome!

K

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2000-05-25 09:32 AM


flow??? I was white water rafting all the way through it!!!
great job

 Kathleen
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Dark Angel
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4 posted 2000-05-25 10:13 AM


Oh My, this is excellent, beautifully written.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)



Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2000-05-25 10:28 AM


Meadow,
Excellent poem, loved the title.

Rex Allen McCoy
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6 posted 2000-05-25 11:34 AM


beautiful Claire

Rex

Denise
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7 posted 2000-05-25 12:18 PM


Claire, this is breathtaking, full of hope and has such a gentle peacefulness about it. Very well written!

Denise

Martie
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8 posted 2000-05-25 06:54 PM


Claire--Such a possitive, sensitive and remarkable poem.  Wonderful!
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9 posted 2000-05-25 11:36 PM


Superb Claire,
              one can feel the touch of new day and the promises that it brings with these words. . .

Wonderful. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


David2
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10 posted 2000-05-26 12:25 PM


Claire,
   Nice poem, great use of words. I love it when poets take advantage of the rich well of words available to them. I enjoyed this.
                  David2

Mike
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11 posted 2000-05-26 12:30 PM


You pen equally with splendor of the dawn as of the night.  First signs of spring harken thee to exquisite beauty my friend.
Meadowmuse
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12 posted 2000-05-26 10:20 PM


   Kit, Severn, Kathleen, Dark Angel, Seymour, Rex, Denise, Martie, Sven, David, and Mike...thank you, in earnest, for reading this and responding with such lovely and encouraging returns.
   Today has been my birthday and I have been also preparing to move to the new (old!) house, so I have just now  been able to connect online, only to find these delightful and generous remarks from each of you.
   I am so glad that you found something to enjoy in this piece and I thank you for letting me know.  

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



doreen peri
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13 posted 2000-05-26 11:23 PM


you are a classic poet, claire

this verse will stand the test of time... make sure you back it up and print it out in case your computer crashes... LOL

it's superb lyric!

Meadowmuse
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14 posted 2000-05-27 09:03 AM


Doreen, thank you for such a kind response! What a lovely thing to say to a poet! So glad you enjoyed this piece, and I do thank you for letting me know.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



brian madden
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15 posted 2000-05-28 03:36 PM


Lilt lightly upward, newly borne,
all grace and tenderness bestowing
Embrace the cockcrow, the sudden morn...
your Freedom's come with Knowing

a fantastic poem, beautiful images and I love the title "falling awake."

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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Do not listen to a word I say
Just listen to what I can keep silent"

Nicky Wire


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