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Irie
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0 posted 05-24-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Irie



I saw you late last night
But my presence you were unaware
In the shadows my heart was breaking
For I could see your pain and despair

Like a phantom I sat in silence
And watched you through the night
As you slept I peered into your soul
And I watched your dreams take flight

The dream that flew the most
Was one of you being set free
To fly away and be happy
Leaving behind your fear and agony

My heart bled many tears
For this soul that’s bound and tied
There must be more than this
Than this empty feeling inside

So I looked deeper into your soul
I found buried under some dust
A heart made of soft pure gold,
Joy, love, happiness and trust

I also saw your gentle nature
Of loving so tender and sweet
Strength, courage and grace
Emerging with each heart beat

I saw a glimmer of hope
Something that you kept
I watched it working hard
As the dust it slowly swept

As this dust is swept away
A splendrous place you’ll find
Peace will be shared with you
In body, soul, spirit and mind

I saw you late last night
I watched ‘till the break of day
And I saw your very essence
In such a beautiful way



[This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-26-2000).]
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aleisha
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1 posted 05-24-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for aleisha   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for aleisha

Irie this is a beautiful poem. It feels like I am in the room with you. Good job my best friend.      
Irie
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2 posted 05-24-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Hey my Precious Gem! Thanks for your reply.
I wish you were here so we could visit!
Makes me smile everytime you end you replies
with "My best friend"  
Thanks a million

~Sheri
Michael
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3 posted 05-25-2000 12:01 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

It's a very special thing when you can see into another's soul...  They are precious and fragile things, indeed...  May you always be able to share your dreams with this one.  

Michael
netswan
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4 posted 05-25-2000 01:25 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Whoa ~Irie - this is excellent work.
Beautiful -----touching ---
thanks for sharing

~netswan
Irie
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5 posted 05-25-2000 12:26 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Michael...It is a special thing isn't it.
I wish so much deep in my heart that this friend is able to
find true happiness!  

Netswan...I'm glad you liked it!

Thank you both for you wonderful comments!  
Denise
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6 posted 05-25-2000 12:29 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is very beautiful, Irie! Very beautiful indeed!

Denise
Bbuzz
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7 posted 05-25-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for Bbuzz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bbuzz

Irie! You are the one with the soft, pure gold heart! I am SOOOOO proud of you! I LOVE YOU! Mom

[This message has been edited by Bbuzz (edited 05-25-2000).]
Lone Wolf
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8 posted 05-25-2000 10:06 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Irie,

Fabulous poem!!  Filled with sweetness and promise throughout.  The end is just wonderful.

LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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9 posted 05-25-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Irie,
     to have the sight is a precious thing indeed. . . you have captured that well in this poem. . .

Truly your friend is lucky to have you. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Janet Marie
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10 posted 05-26-2000 12:56 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

As this dust is swept away
A splendrous place you’ll find
Peace will be shared with you
In body, soul, spirit and mind

I saw you late last night
I watched ‘till the break of day
And I saw your very essence
In such a beautiful way
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this is a beautiful, well written and expressed dedication to your compassion for anothers pain..wondeful writing
jm


 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Irie
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11 posted 05-26-2000 12:58 AM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Denise
    Thank you so much! I'm glad you think so. That means a lot!  

Bbuzz
    Hey Mom, I think you're just a slightly biased, but that's ok. I still
enjoy your comments! Love you too Mom!   And thank you  

LW
   Thank you my friend, I'm glad you enjoyed!

Sven
    Yes, thank you and thank you. As I am just as  truly
lucky to have this friend!  

Again, thank you all for you wonderful and kind comments!
I appreciate them all.  
Irie
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12 posted 05-26-2000 01:03 AM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Jant
   You snuck in on me!   Thank you so much for your
kind reply. I'm glad you think so much of this one. This poem
means a lot to me.  
EagleOne
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13 posted 05-26-2000 03:29 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

The title is perfect, you see much! This is wonderful work, wondefully expressed.

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


shilpi
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14 posted 05-27-2000 12:36 PM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

ohh my....this is too good for words, its true what they say....when heart is full , words are few !!

surely Irie, only a person so deep in love can see another so transparent....

i hope that person sees you equally well !!

shilpi
Irie
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15 posted 05-29-2000 03:12 AM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

EagleOne...
     Thank you so much! Perfect and wonderful.
Two very complimenting words!  

Shilpi...
     And thank you too. I think when you love someone or
even care about one so much...you can see!  

You've both made my night!



 ~Sheri
tracie66
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16 posted 05-29-2000 03:39 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Irie~
This is a most amazing piece.
Words so sad and longing yet peaceful and touching. What a bag full of emotions you have shown here.
....nicely done.....
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Kit McCallum
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17 posted 05-29-2000 07:29 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

This wonderfully full of powerful insight and emotions, beautifully written Irie!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Marge Tindal
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18 posted 05-29-2000 05:51 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Irie~
I surely enjoyed this.
Friendship is so precious to each of us.
Wonderful way you expressed your feelings.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Irie
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19 posted 05-30-2000 08:06 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Tracie, Kit and Marge,
Thank you so much for your kind and wonderful words!
Friendship is surely is a precious thing, and I seem
to be finding many friends here at Passions.
Thank you all!  
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