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Irie
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since 1999-12-01
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Washington State

0 posted 2000-05-24 11:23 PM




I saw you late last night
But my presence you were unaware
In the shadows my heart was breaking
For I could see your pain and despair

Like a phantom I sat in silence
And watched you through the night
As you slept I peered into your soul
And I watched your dreams take flight

The dream that flew the most
Was one of you being set free
To fly away and be happy
Leaving behind your fear and agony

My heart bled many tears
For this soul that’s bound and tied
There must be more than this
Than this empty feeling inside

So I looked deeper into your soul
I found buried under some dust
A heart made of soft pure gold,
Joy, love, happiness and trust

I also saw your gentle nature
Of loving so tender and sweet
Strength, courage and grace
Emerging with each heart beat

I saw a glimmer of hope
Something that you kept
I watched it working hard
As the dust it slowly swept

As this dust is swept away
A splendrous place you’ll find
Peace will be shared with you
In body, soul, spirit and mind

I saw you late last night
I watched ‘till the break of day
And I saw your very essence
In such a beautiful way



[This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-26-2000).]

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aleisha
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since 2000-05-04
Posts 10

1 posted 2000-05-24 11:31 PM


Irie this is a beautiful poem. It feels like I am in the room with you. Good job my best friend.      
Irie
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2 posted 2000-05-24 11:54 PM


Hey my Precious Gem! Thanks for your reply.
I wish you were here so we could visit!
Makes me smile everytime you end you replies
with "My best friend"  
Thanks a million

~Sheri

Michael
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3 posted 2000-05-25 12:01 PM


It's a very special thing when you can see into another's soul...  They are precious and fragile things, indeed...  May you always be able to share your dreams with this one.  

Michael

netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
4 posted 2000-05-25 01:25 AM


Whoa ~Irie - this is excellent work.
Beautiful -----touching ---
thanks for sharing

~netswan

Irie
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Posts 1493
Washington State
5 posted 2000-05-25 12:26 PM


Michael...It is a special thing isn't it.
I wish so much deep in my heart that this friend is able to
find true happiness!  

Netswan...I'm glad you liked it!

Thank you both for you wonderful comments!  

Denise
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6 posted 2000-05-25 12:29 PM


This is very beautiful, Irie! Very beautiful indeed!

Denise

Bbuzz
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Washinton State
7 posted 2000-05-25 07:49 PM


Irie! You are the one with the soft, pure gold heart! I am SOOOOO proud of you! I LOVE YOU! Mom

[This message has been edited by Bbuzz (edited 05-25-2000).]

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
8 posted 2000-05-25 10:06 PM


Irie,

Fabulous poem!!  Filled with sweetness and promise throughout.  The end is just wonderful.

LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Sven
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9 posted 2000-05-25 11:02 PM


Irie,
     to have the sight is a precious thing indeed. . . you have captured that well in this poem. . .

Truly your friend is lucky to have you. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

10 posted 2000-05-26 12:56 PM


As this dust is swept away
A splendrous place you’ll find
Peace will be shared with you
In body, soul, spirit and mind

I saw you late last night
I watched ‘till the break of day
And I saw your very essence
In such a beautiful way
----------

this is a beautiful, well written and expressed dedication to your compassion for anothers pain..wondeful writing
jm


 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~



Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
11 posted 2000-05-26 12:58 PM


Denise
    Thank you so much! I'm glad you think so. That means a lot!  

Bbuzz
    Hey Mom, I think you're just a slightly biased, but that's ok. I still
enjoy your comments! Love you too Mom!   And thank you  

LW
   Thank you my friend, I'm glad you enjoyed!

Sven
    Yes, thank you and thank you. As I am just as  truly
lucky to have this friend!  

Again, thank you all for you wonderful and kind comments!
I appreciate them all.  

Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
12 posted 2000-05-26 01:03 AM


Jant
   You snuck in on me!   Thank you so much for your
kind reply. I'm glad you think so much of this one. This poem
means a lot to me.  

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
13 posted 2000-05-26 03:29 AM


The title is perfect, you see much! This is wonderful work, wondefully expressed.

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



shilpi
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since 2000-05-24
Posts 73

14 posted 2000-05-27 12:36 PM


ohh my....this is too good for words, its true what they say....when heart is full , words are few !!

surely Irie, only a person so deep in love can see another so transparent....

i hope that person sees you equally well !!

shilpi

Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
15 posted 2000-05-29 03:12 AM


EagleOne...
     Thank you so much! Perfect and wonderful.
Two very complimenting words!  

Shilpi...
     And thank you too. I think when you love someone or
even care about one so much...you can see!  

You've both made my night!



 ~Sheri

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
16 posted 2000-05-29 03:39 AM


Irie~
This is a most amazing piece.
Words so sad and longing yet peaceful and touching. What a bag full of emotions you have shown here.
....nicely done.....
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
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Ontario, Canada
17 posted 2000-05-29 07:29 AM


This wonderfully full of powerful insight and emotions, beautifully written Irie!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Marge Tindal
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18 posted 2000-05-29 05:51 PM


Irie~
I surely enjoyed this.
Friendship is so precious to each of us.
Wonderful way you expressed your feelings.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
19 posted 2000-05-30 08:06 PM


Tracie, Kit and Marge,
Thank you so much for your kind and wonderful words!
Friendship is surely is a precious thing, and I seem
to be finding many friends here at Passions.
Thank you all!  

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