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Growing so Sweet and Treacherous

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Martie
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Growing so Sweet and Treacherous

The tree and that crack
in the sidewalk are the same,
where I flew like a small creature
made from wind and hair and scabbed knee
down and over the small bump that the root
curved just so for my delight.

I would stop and pull the corked bark
out a little and it seemed it opened
just for me to hide treasures,
pieces of polished glass
a lovely smooth pebble
a four leaf clover,
somehow I thought as I drove by
they might still be there
waiting my charge
into a new adventure.

The house where I grew up
still stands with dormer window eyes
and a door now filled with stained glass.
The green lawn so good for running,
was where I broke my arm tripping on the sprinkler,
now there is a hill there
with a jungle of delicious flowering plants
and although it is the same
it is twenty years different then when
my mother locked the door one final time
and then later I comforted myself with her ghost.

I wanted to knock and proclaim myself the person
who put love notes so tenderly written
under the eves outside my bedroom window,
I was the one who ate all those sandwiches outside
and hid them in that hedge out front.
I think the peanut butter and tuna fish
must still be perfect
and undisturbed now.

Above the garage now
is a beautiful room with lovely windows
when before it held my butterfly collection
and was where my brother sent my first admirer
up the ladder then pulled it away and made him stay
‘til he was done with following me,
for I was twelve and knew nothing of my sexual power
or the burgeoning heat that had attracted him.

You are still soaking with memory
house…dear house where growing
was so sweet and treacherous,
you still hold the scars and laughter
of my childhood locked inside.


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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 05-24-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~

'dormer' windows ...
brings memories cascading from my own past.

Oh, to visit the rooms of the house with the lace-curtained dormer windows of my childhood home.  The lush hydrangea bushes that lined the wrap-around porch .. with the swing .. oh, the swing of childish moorings and songs sung in unison with the 'visitors' in my head. (didn't know it was poetry then)

How I appreciate your nostalgic trip.
Thank you, my friend.
~*Marge*~



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What a lovely picture of nostalgia-
thanks for sharing, Martie -
Enjoyed this - tune and peanut butter
still there?  LOL

~netswan
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3 posted 05-24-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You've outdone yourself, Martie. This one is terrific! I've gotten these same feelings by looking at my childhood house, or my high school or a replica of my first car. You describe everything so well....
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Marge--what a beauiful reply--you need to write a dormer window poem...hugs!

Netswan--about the peanut butter and Tuna...I was so afraid to be discovered that I confessed before the hedge was cut down...and of course was surprised there was nothing there...LOL..thanks for the read.

Balladeer--thanks for enjoying this...looking back is fun and for me, I don't have to drive to far to do it.
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5 posted 05-25-2000 10:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I pass by the house that I grew up in every time I go for my walks. So much has changed and so much is still the same. I'm glad that I can see it whenever I feel the need to. Your poem is very sweet and brought back many memories for me.

Denise
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6 posted 05-26-2000 12:38 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Outdid yourself on this one Martie.  What a treat to read and enjoy.  
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Martie I also enjoyed this lovely walk down memory lane.  James
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8 posted 05-26-2000 06:23 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Oh Martie...this really just moved me...I am sitting here with tears in my eyes I am!

Wow...your imagery is absolutely superb. Your words truly bring your poetry to life my friend.

Hey - are you submitting to publishers? For you should be.

K
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Denise--I'm so glad to have brought some of your memories back with my poem.

Mike--So happy you found a treat here.

James--Thanks for walking with me.

Kamla--Submitting yes...I have the rejection letters to prove it.  
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I found myself smiling and sighing as I walked through your nostalgic poem, and allowed my mind to idly slip in visions of my own past.

This is so timely for me Martie, as just days ago, my mother and I took a side trip to my childhood home.  We simply sat out front and held hands together ... no words were said aloud to break our magical spell.  You've captured this feeling beautifully!

Thanks for a lovely trip down memory lane,
/Kit
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11 posted 05-26-2000 02:31 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Martie - what a great poem!  It brought back such sweet memories
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12 posted 05-26-2000 02:57 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Wow Martie, that was beautiful. a wonderful journey down memory lane thanks for sharing.



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