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........my next life

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shilpi
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0 posted 05-24-2000 01:01 PM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi



i dedicate this poem to the person i want to be with, the most......if not in this life, but in the next atleast......
few lines, they maybe, but its everything i feel....





.....My Next Life


If I am ever given the liberty of rebirth
I'd choose to be reborn as your tear.......

Born in your eyes
Live on your cheeks
Die in your lips








[This message has been edited by shilpi (edited 05-26-2000).]
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A Romantic Heart
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1 posted 05-24-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

This was so moving!  Welcome to passions!
Irie
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2 posted 05-24-2000 01:23 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

WOW, I'm not sure what to think or say about this one.
It's so bitter sweet! To be so close to some one even
if it's for just a short while.
Welcome to Passions Shilpi.  
Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 05-24-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Great start and wonderful thought...

Shilpi, WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!
And enjoy your stay here...


Regards, sudhir.

 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
shilpi
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4 posted 05-24-2000 01:43 PM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

Romantic Heart, i'm glad u like it !!
Angelwings
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5 posted 05-24-2000 01:45 PM       View Profile for Angelwings   Email Angelwings   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angelwings

Wow shelpi~
   What can I say?  This poem although is short it's bittersweet.  It must be nice to know who you want to be with and what complete dedication to that person as to be with them in the next life.  What a wonderful honor this must be to that person.  Welcome to Passions, I hope to see more of you!  


Sometimes the things you can't find the words for come to you in the form of a poem~just sit down and let it flow.  
Angelwings
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6 posted 05-24-2000 01:46 PM       View Profile for Angelwings   Email Angelwings   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angelwings

I apologize for spelling your name wrong shilpi  
shilpi
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7 posted 05-24-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

Irie, yes , it is very precious to be that close to someone u truly care about.....

thanx for reading

Sunshine
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8 posted 05-24-2000 01:56 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

You've painted quite a picture here...and the forum moderator will be getting to you soon with a special Welcome to Passions!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

ESP
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9 posted 05-24-2000 02:01 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

WOW!!!!!
Welcome to Passions, Shilpi!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
brian madden
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10 posted 05-24-2000 05:10 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Life

If I am ever given the liberty of rebirth
I'd choose to be reborn as your tear.......

Born in your eyes
Live in your cheeks
Die in your lips

beautiful imagery yet emotions of sadness,
you summed up the desire for love perfectly.
Well said, great poem.


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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto


netswan
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11 posted 05-24-2000 05:25 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Welcome to Passions, Shilpi
What a beautiful poem. I do not feel
it needed an explanation.  Some poems
manage to need one, but this one I would
have recognized immediately of what it is.

*Sigh* at such love -

~netswan
Lorraine Nisbet
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12 posted 05-24-2000 05:39 PM       View Profile for Lorraine Nisbet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lorraine Nisbet


Hi,shilpi,

Short and sweet, couldn't get any better.  Great imagery.  Welcome!  Your going to love it here.

~Lorraine
jwesley
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13 posted 05-24-2000 06:07 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Extremely well said in so short a piece.
Welcome to Passions....wonderful place to be.

jwesley


P.S....would "live ON your cheeks" be better than "IN" your cheeks??

j.

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SpitFire
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14 posted 05-24-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Welcome friend....very cool read here.  Thanks for sharing.  
shilpi
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15 posted 05-26-2000 02:20 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi


Thanks a lot ,Sudhir, it is indeed a pleasure to hear praises from a wonderful writer like you !!
shilpi
shilpi
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16 posted 05-26-2000 02:25 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

Well, infact, it is an honor for me to be with that person, who is in my heart.
Thankyou , Angelwings, for reading and posting your response.

p.s. the spelling mistake, its alright !!

[This message has been edited by shilpi (edited 05-26-2000).]
shilpi
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17 posted 05-26-2000 02:30 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

Sunshine....know what is more satisfying than writing what is in your heart? its when people read and approve of it !!

loads of thanks
shilpi

[This message has been edited by shilpi (edited 05-26-2000).]
wayoutwalt
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18 posted 05-26-2000 02:32 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

this is very well done in presentation and those last two stanzas knocked me out great work o yuh welcome to passions!

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-26-2000).]
shilpi
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19 posted 05-26-2000 02:36 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi

ESP, Netswan ,Lorraine & Spitfire ,

My hearty thanks to all you wonderful people for reading the poem !! Your encouragement is all it takes to be better.

regards
shilpi
shilpi
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20 posted 05-26-2000 02:47 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi


I wanted my poem to have a tinge of sadness or should i say,a haunting melancholy, also, because all those who have truly loved, know pretty well that love is not always a bed of roses, we do have to account for some thorns too !!

Thankyou Brian !!

shilpi

shilpi
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21 posted 05-26-2000 06:47 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi


Jwesley, thanks a lot for the suggestion, I have corrected it.....
Its my pleasure to be here, in this wonderful place, surrounded by you fine people !!

shilpi
shilpi
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Wayoutwalt, lol , kinda knocked me off too while writing the poem !!

regards,
shilpi
killer222
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23 posted 05-26-2000 07:30 AM       View Profile for killer222   Email killer222   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for killer222

Nice, Welcome to passions
shilpi
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24 posted 05-26-2000 07:36 AM       View Profile for shilpi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shilpi


My pleasure, Killer222, mine indeed !!
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