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failed communication

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Corazon
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0 posted 05-24-2000 11:17 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

failed communication

your control has grown over the years
until it towers above me
we sit feet firmly
on the floor
you needn’t stand
for fear  
to send
me
spinning deep
into the impenetrable silence
of my anger





[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-24-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved
doreen peri
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1 posted 05-24-2000 12:34 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

"spinning deep
into the impenetrable silence
of my anger"

Damn, girl! Love these lines... love the whole thing! this happens all the time with your work... did i write this? LOL
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 05-24-2000 12:47 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Corazon,
Reads like your on the edge. Good writing.
brian madden
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3 posted 05-24-2000 01:52 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

powerful stuff,

"your control has grown over the years
until it towers above me"

great poem,

"spinning deep
into the impenetrable silence
of my anger"

but I am reminded of a quote from Welsh poet
Patrick Jones
"There is eloquence in screaming".



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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

Small Black Flowers That Grow In The Sky

"You have your very own number
They dress your cage in its nature
Once you roared now you just grunt lame
Pace around pathetic pound games

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

They drag sticks along your walls
Harvest your ovaries dead mothers crawl
Here comes warden, Christ, temple, elder
Environment not yours you see through it all

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


4 posted 05-24-2000 02:03 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Ah! So much depth...
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Oh, angry one!
Oh, silent one!

I am scared, stand in fear
nay, not by your wrath, nor by your ire,
but by the silence that seethes with it,
cold, steely, mighty, cruel, painful pit...
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Nice work here corazon,
Enjoyed it, regards, sudhir

 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
SpitFire
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5 posted 05-24-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Oh dear me,....*sigh*, what an expression.  Thank you for sharing this power packed piece. *Take care...Peace.
Corazon
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6 posted 05-24-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

doreen, “did I write this?” wow you couldn’t have paid me a higher compliment     thank you much

Seymour…yep sort of am…thanks though

brian  thanks for your compliments and for taking the time to include the quote, wow, powerful…am going to save this one and the verse from sudhir below both with my poem….

Sudhir, you too, thank you for the verse it is powerful and deep and yes  I understand it well…sigh

spitfire, thanks...I knew I had a poem in me this morning...lol...I could feel the labor pains....and then this one tumbled out  




[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-24-2000).]
Irie
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7 posted 05-24-2000 03:27 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

WOW!
This is so well expressed with such little words.
I know this feeling all to well, and you expressed it for me,
better than I ever could have.
And wonderfuly at that!
Great Poem you have here Corazon!
ESP
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since 01-25-2000
Posts 2574
Floating gently on a cloud....


8 posted 05-24-2000 03:30 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

WOW!!! This is great!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
Rocketman
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since 05-24-2000
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9 posted 05-24-2000 03:43 PM       View Profile for Rocketman   Email Rocketman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rocketman

What power...words!  All that vividness in 36 words.  Moving and soulful and gets right to the heart of the matter.  What a very wonderful piece of writing.  I look forward to reading others.

Rocket
Corazon
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10 posted 05-24-2000 05:42 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thank you all so much for your replies, do you know that in doing so and knowing that I am able to reach you with my words you help me heal?
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