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serenity blaze
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0 posted 05-24-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Never, have I said:
   "Complete."
Never has my heart
   beat three.
And no, not I,
   to be confused--
'concession speech'
(It's true...I lose...)

No, not once, when heart beat twice,
did ever whisper I:  "Suffice..."
I yearn my heart beat time to one.
(Creation--all would be undone...)
Methinks you WANT (for me to bleed...)
Chalice--empty--craving seed...

Empty I,
awaiting fate--
(amongst the dogs, I leave full plate...)

puzzled by their need.
© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
bsquirrel
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1 posted 05-24-2000 02:28 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Jeez, sen, you get the notion of love's (yearning's, lust's, whatever's) confusion perfectly here. Did someone really say you wrote pedestrian poetry? Then get out the crosswalk STOP signs, and beat whoever said that over the head with them.  

Mike
serenity blaze
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2 posted 05-24-2000 02:32 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thank you Mike you really don't know how much this means to me...but if you keep calling me sen.---I shall have to start calling myself Senator Serenity...now NOBODY wants that....(and you are definetely cheering me up, luv, thank you...)
wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)


3 posted 05-24-2000 02:37 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

wow senator this is beat me in the pants great stuff

 in a canyon in a cavern excavatin for a mine
dwelt a miner forty niner and his daughter clemintine!!! yeehaw!
bsquirrel
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4 posted 05-24-2000 02:45 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Okay, I see yr point. S'en it is.  

Mike
spiked
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5 posted 05-24-2000 07:45 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Bleeding isn't necessry as you have given up so much in this poem already.
very well done
"hugs"
Rich
Janet Marie
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6 posted 05-24-2000 09:19 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Never, have I said:
   "Complete."
Never has my heart
   beat three.
-------------
No, not once, when heart beat twice,
did ever whisper I:  "Suffice..."
I yearn my heart beat time to one.
(Creation--all would be undone...)
Methinks you WANT (for me to bleed...)
Chalice--empty--craving seed...
-------------

where did ya get that mirror...
its looks so familiar *smile*
oh me twin...
you know that I know that you know...(oh no).
puzzeled??? oh yes ...but then if we
understood it... we wouldnt want it...or need it...or crave it...
if we understood it...we would know better
i know, you know...
later me sweet twin gator
jm
serenity blaze
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7 posted 05-25-2000 10:24 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thanks again to my friends fer yer support...
and walt...what a nice suprprise to hear from you, as I'm a big fan of yours...thanks...
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 05-25-2000 10:41 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Serenity,
Enjoyed the read, cheer up, nice poem.
Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London


9 posted 05-25-2000 11:00 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

you write so beautiful ... and express such sorrow ... your thoughts are very intoxicating
to the reader

Rex
Crystal Lynn
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since 05-21-2000
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Miami, FL. USA


10 posted 05-25-2000 12:35 PM       View Profile for Crystal Lynn   Email Crystal Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Crystal Lynn

its hard to capture thoughts on paper..but you seem to be able to do it with ur eyes shut...great poem i look forward to reading others...

crystal
brian madden
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ireland


11 posted 05-25-2000 01:58 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

serenity, a great poem.

I love the line, Chalice--empty--craving seed...

fantastic read.

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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto


Parker
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... the old black rum


12 posted 05-25-2000 02:05 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

serenity, wow I must agree with the above great poem, great read, just love the form.


seed awaiting chalice-need....  

Parker
 
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