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SpitFire
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0 posted 2000-05-23 11:40 AM




Sleepless Nights

~A midnight whisper to a hollow soul~
~Sleepless encounters continue to haunt~
~Walking through minds overwhelmed~
~Pressing heat against dying skin~
~Analizing, pondering,...stretching~
~Attempting to release all ties~
~Needing rest from hardened times~
~Vacant eyes stare into vacant space~
~Energy drawn from bloodless veins~
~Weakened and dark the night calls~
~The soul empty, the eyes blank, the heart broken.~



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Angelwings
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1 posted 2000-05-23 01:05 PM


What a wonderful discription of the blankness when you cannot form words or thoughts or ideas.  You're numb with pain and anger.  Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.
SusieQue
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2 posted 2000-05-23 01:45 PM


When all emotions are spent....the living death. It does pass and the soul may be altered but does come back to live and love again...if we allow it.

***Susie***

SpitFire
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3 posted 2000-05-23 04:50 PM


~Thank you both kindly for taking the time to read and comment.  I too have faith that it'll pass,..the fog is just really thick right now.  Thanks again. *Peace.
insect
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4 posted 2000-05-23 11:35 PM


Great poem!
I think we've all had sleepless nights.
Good description!

Christopher
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5 posted 2000-05-24 12:50 PM


Now this is an absolute jewel of a poem! I've had many a night just like the one you've described here. Though I must admit, many of mine carried over into the days as well.

~Vacant eyes stare into vacant space~

Indeed.

"Is there a cure among us
For this processed sanity?"
~Collective Soul~

EagleOne
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6 posted 2000-05-24 01:27 AM


this is fabulous work! I hope the fog clears for you soon. take care!

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



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7 posted 2000-05-24 01:34 AM


SpitFire~
I LOVE the way you formatted these thoughts.

'Attempting to release' ...
and when it's done, you will once again enjoy the sleep-filled nights with many dreams.

Enjoyed.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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SpitFire
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8 posted 2000-05-24 09:56 AM


~Insect,...thanks for taking the time my friend to read and reply.  I think we all have had them...mine are just continuing for months now?...It'll be fine.

~Now Christopher,...a Jewel???...how cool.    thank you for that.

~EagleOne,...thank you for the kind words and for the hoping.  It helps.

~Marge,...thank you dear for reading.  That is exactly what this was,..simply thoughts,..not really a poem but it felt right.  I have faith that it WILL be done sometime and when it is,..*sigh* then I will be good.

*Over in Dark I posted a poem titled Prison,..another little bit of insight into what it feels like I am living in right now.
~Thank you all....*Peace.

Denise
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9 posted 2000-05-24 10:08 AM


Great writing, SpitFire! Your words conveyed exactly how it must feel.

Denise

Danny Holloway
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10 posted 2000-05-24 11:18 AM


~~nice writing~~ this poem carried some strong expression.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


doreen peri
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11 posted 2000-05-24 12:40 PM


Fabulous!

"spinning deep
into the impenetrable silence
of my anger"

you been watching me or something for the last 5 nights? hehe

well done!

brian madden
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12 posted 2000-05-24 01:58 PM


I had a late night last night and now I am really tired it is almost if I had no sleep at all, anyway sorry on to the point.

midnight whisper to a hollow soul~
~Sleepless encounters continue to haunt~
~Walking through minds overwhelmed~
~Pressing heat against dying skin~
~Analizing, pondering,...stretching~
~Attempting to release all ties~
~Needing rest from hardened times~
~Vacant eyes stare into vacant space~
~Energy drawn from bloodless veins~
~Weakened and dark the night calls~
~The soul empty, the eyes blank, the heart broken.~

That was quite powerful, great poem.

I hope things improve, and the sand man pays you visit tonight.  



 ------------------------
"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

Small Black Flowers That Grow In The Sky

"You have your very own number
They dress your cage in its nature
Once you roared now you just grunt lame
Pace around pathetic pound games

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

They drag sticks along your walls
Harvest your ovaries dead mothers crawl
Here comes warden, Christ, temple, elder
Environment not yours you see through it all

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards


RAM
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13 posted 2000-05-24 02:35 PM


powerful piece, SpitFire

the sun burns through the fog, eventually

SpitFire
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14 posted 2000-05-24 02:58 PM


~Denise,...thank you friend for reading and replying....your kindness goes a long way.

~Danny,...thank you for the ~nice writing~..hehe..too kind of you.  

~Doreen,...oh thank you for reading me.  Heck, if I had known you couldn't sleep either I would of contacted you J/K.

*Look at all those "D" names .

~Brian,...thanks for the hoping of the sandman,...and for taking the time.

~RAM,...I'll be watching for that sun,...thank you for reading.

*I am honestly amazed at how many people have responded to this nonpoem....sort of thought list thing here.   Gosh,..you guys are great. *Peace.

jwesley
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15 posted 2000-05-24 04:55 PM


Loved it Spitfire, always look forward, no matter what...and love is always wonderful even if a fleeting thing at times...and the memories we dream in later life temper the pains of youth, though when in youth we fail to recognize the memories we're making.

jwesley

Lonelypoet
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16 posted 2000-05-24 06:44 PM


SpitFire,
Good poem, and very imangination provoking to me, hope to see more.

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