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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 05-23-2000 07:49 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Why?

She sailed on the ocean a small lonely girl
Not knowing what life was about to unfurl
Uprooted by pain during troubling days
Now forced into refuge in troubling ways

With a mother’s uncertainty clenching her tight
Leaving homeland and siblings in darkness of night
A girl in long pigtails sailed over the sea
Holding on to the promise of her destiny

A compassionate lady then greeted the two
When the Statue of Liberty came into view
They said Ellis Island would cleanse soul and  mind
But the pain never left as they waited in line

She started a new life of hardships and fright
And the memories of siblings she left in the night
But never again would she speak of her strife
And she carried it silently all of her life

Though laughter would fill her exuberant days
Her sorrow was passed on in secretive ways
For the silence of spirit was felt by her young
Who lived in the shadow of quieting tongue

Her young daughter’s heartaches could never be told
To a mother who’s heart no more sorrow could hold
So without knowing why, this girl suffered in vain
Because of the phantom of secreted pain

The two who had sailed on a ship in the night
Have now passed through the portals of God’s Holy Light
And happiness dwells in her daughter’s embrace
Now with children and grandchildren lighting her face

Then one day without warning the truth became known
Why her mother left family to find a new home
No measure could fathom the pain that I feel
For a mother who’s tragedy has become real

Mother, please know that I now understand
Why you came here in pigtails and clenching a hand
I forgive you the burden of all of my tears
I just wish I had known this in your living years

From my children no ghosts of my past do I hold
My mistakes and my grief have been openly told

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 05-24-2000).]
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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 05-23-2000 08:07 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, my dear friend~
A beautifully touching render
that was torn from your soul.
Someday, my friend ...
I'd like to hear the story.
Loving hugs to you.
~*Marge*~


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Meadowmuse
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2 posted 05-23-2000 08:25 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

A sensitive, insightful and poignantly told story, Liz.
For a mother who is full of her own sorrow and secrets, as much as she may want to absorb the pain of her children from them, she simply mayn't have the capacity. I can very much understand this mother and daughter relationship, as it could easily be nearly a mirror image of my own, with my own tormented mother, now resting peacefully with God. Thank you for these compassionate, reminding tears, my friend, and for this beautifully written poem.

~ Claire  

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 05-23-2000 08:29 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
A wonderful poem as only you could write it.
But I do believe we all carry secrets with us
where ever we go. Love Sy
Janet Marie
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4 posted 05-23-2000 10:32 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Though laughter would fill her exuberant days
Her sorrow was passed on in secretive ways
For the silence of spirit was felt by her young
Who lived in the shadow of quieting tongue

Her young daughter’s heartaches could never be told
To mother who’s heart no more sorrow could hold
So without knowing why, this girl suffered in vain
Because of the phantom of secreted pain

The two who had sailed on a ship in the night
Have now passed through the portals of God’s Holy Light
And happiness dwells in her daughter’s embrace
Now with children and grandchildren lighting her face

Then one day without warning the truth became known
Why her mother left family to find a new home
No measure could fathom the pain that I feel
For a mother who’s tragedy has become real

Mother, please know that I now understand
Why you came here in pigtails and clenching a hand
I forgive you the burden of all of my tears
I just wish I had known this in your living years

From my children no ghosts of my past do I hold
My mistakes and my grief have been openly told
-------------------

LIZ, this poem is nothing short of a poetic miracle...
I am left shaken and touched by the
depth of emotion, honesty, and understanding.
This is one of the most powerful story poems I've ever read.
the last 4 lines are so perfect and brilliant
you are such an amazing poet...
you shine divine.
take care, jm



 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)


5 posted 05-23-2000 10:40 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

wow this poem is so great thanx for posting it i must say cuz i enjoyed it so!
ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....


6 posted 05-23-2000 02:24 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Liz, this is so beautiful and so sad....a story told by your heart and soul. Words can't express how this one has touched me.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
Denise
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7 posted 05-23-2000 02:42 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent, Elizabeth! No matter the secret, you have been able to understand and accept and forgive. That's what is most important!

Denise
netswan
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8 posted 05-23-2000 05:02 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Oh, Elizabeth this was heart breaking -
Written so sweetly - and such an interesting
story!

~netswan
Corinne
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Posts 5247
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9 posted 05-23-2000 06:26 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Achingly beautiful and mysterious, Elizabeth.

Corinne
Martie
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10 posted 05-23-2000 06:41 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Liz--I was reading this outloud to my friend, and could hardly finish for the tears and cracking voice...this is beautifully told...and so tender and forgiving ...it just takes my breath away.
Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 05-23-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Marge, Some day we will talk. Thank you so much
LIz

Claire, I guess many people have a similar story. But how we deal with our past determines how others are affected by it. I happened to be deeply affected by the unknown for many years. I see that you were also. Thanks for sharing a little piece of your life
Liz

Sy, We all carry secrets, but they should not be carried on anyone else's shoulders. But sometimes they are
Liz

Janet Marie, Your enthusiasm always amazes me. Thank you, dear, for your kind words
Liz

Walt, Glad you liked it
LIz

Lizzie, You touch my heart
THank you
Liz

Denise, Unfortunately you can't forgive the unknown, and so it took 50 years to know the truth and then forgive
Liz

Netswan, Thank you so much
Liz

Corinne, I love your descriptions and I thank you
Liz

Martie, Thanks for reading to a friend, how lovely. I'm glad you liked it that much
Liz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 05-23-2000).]
Sven
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12 posted 05-23-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Liz,
    this is simply beautiful. . . there really isn't another way to say it. . . simply beautiful. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

EagleOne
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13 posted 05-24-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Excellent! A powerful and emotional story.

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


Dark Angel
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14 posted 05-24-2000 02:14 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Elizabeth, this is a beautifully told story filled with sadness and heartache. I am left speechless. Excellent. *hugs*

Maree

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


Elizabeth Santos
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Posts 9405
Pennsylvania


15 posted 05-24-2000 07:43 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sven, Thanks, dear

Eagle one, Glad you liked it

Dark Angel, You're very sensitive, Thanks

Liz
 
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