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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-05-22 09:49 PM


               Will I?

Phantom flowers line my eye.
And thoughts ghost odors there.  
Desires marrow struck deep dye,
Full blown its web of snare.  

My wings are bound I cannot fly
I wait in awes forbear.
The knot is Gregorian tie.
It will not fail or tear.

O' Henrys doors awaits espy,
My captors will of dare.
For me to choose and dwell a lie
The cost my soul, in fare.

I stand and hear the tigers cry
Torment lies in its farewell.
Will I live or will I die,
Heavens there, but so is hell.

Is love behind O' Henrys door?
Or is there something wrong with or?


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Sven
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1 posted 2000-05-22 10:17 PM


Sy, the questions that life throws at us. . .

Great poem, my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Aimster
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2 posted 2000-05-22 11:16 PM


Sy

this one left me deep in thought. you have asked some good and complicated questions here my fellow poet. great poem, i really liked!

amy  


 
"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."


Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-05-23 08:03 AM


O' Henrys doors awaits espy,
My captors will of dare.
For me to choose and dwell a lie
The cost my soul, in fare.

I stand and hear the tigers cry
Torment lies in its farewell.
Will I live or will I die,
Heavens there, but so is hell.

Is love behind O' Henrys door?
Or is there something wrong with or?

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this is quite a cryptic, deep poem here SY-guy...
reads like a confession of sorts ...
me thinks it hold much between the lines as well.

>Heavens there, but so is hell.<

what an amazing line that one is...truly
life's hardest questions and a catch 22 along side.
it aint easy is it, my poetic friend...I know.
excellent writing SY-gator, later jm



 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~



Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-05-23 08:12 AM


Seymour~
Sometimes you catch me in your suspense ...
and I'm left to ponder.

'I stand and hear the tigers cry
Torment lies in its farewell.'

I wish you a garden of daffodils, my friend.
Love you~
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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SpitFire
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5 posted 2000-05-23 11:14 AM


~"The cost my soul, in fare.".....*sigh*,...Wow!!!...just wow on this one.  Thank you for sharing.
Sunshine
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6 posted 2000-05-23 12:12 PM


Just getting in line to say "wow" and to let you know that I always read your more profound poems slowly, letting each word take on a different meaning, or a proposed meaning of what it possibly is you are truly saying...

food for thought, love for heart...

as always, quite wonderful...

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Sunshine
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7 posted 2000-05-23 12:15 PM


Just getting in line to say "wow" and to let you know that I always read your more profound poems slowly, letting each word take on a different meaning, or a proposed meaning of what it possibly is you are truly saying...

food for thought, love for heart...

as always, quite wonderful...

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 2000-05-23 05:20 PM


Me thinks Janet Marie has a brilliant and perceptive mind
Me thinks she reads you well in between the written line
Me thinks there's not much from Janet Marie you can hide
Cause she's got a lot of life's sentiments hidden inside
Great poem, Sy
Liz

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2000-05-23 06:42 PM


Sven, Thank you friend.

Aimster, Thank you for the like.

Janet, You read well between the lines.
Sy-gator.

Marge, Thank you for the daffodils. *L*

Spitfire, Good line, thank you for the WOW.

Sunshine, Thank you for the wonderful, but not as wonderful as you. *L*

Elizabeth, Me thinks you are right about Janet. Love Sy



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