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jerryssss
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since 2000-05-22
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0 posted 2000-05-22 08:58 PM


Dreamworld.

There is a place, told to me
So precious, so pure, so heavenly,
Where hand in hand, cheek to cheek,
I kiss the only one, for whom my heart beats.

Her gaze would make me quiver,
With joy and delight,
Her caress - a charmed beckoning,
Enthralling me into this world so enchanting,

Of lavished orchards with scented roses,
And of clear, mystical, starry nights,
Where the scent of passion lingers and abounds,
Amidst two star-crossed lovers’ fervent sounds.

This world I dream of, my lover and me,
Keeps me going, when I can’t see thee,
A tortured desire to be close to you,
Oh how I long for my dream to come true.


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Aimster
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1 posted 2000-05-22 09:17 PM


Jerry--

this is breathtaking! you have some lovely expressions here. true poetry from your pen here my dear! great job. i look forward to reading much more of your work

~Amy~


 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Corinne
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2 posted 2000-05-22 10:25 PM


Lovely!

Welcome to Passions, too!

Corinne

SpitFire
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3 posted 2000-05-22 10:39 PM


~Welcome, welcome!!! This is beautiful.  I look forward to your future posts. .
Butterflies_dont_cry
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4 posted 2000-05-22 10:44 PM



What a wonderful entrance you have made, this is a beatiful weave of words!! Welcome to Passions!


 The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams

~Eleanor Roosevelt~

Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2000-05-22 11:57 PM


Your dream is expressed quite eloquently in this verse...lovely writing. Welcome...

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


netswan
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6 posted 2000-05-22 11:59 PM


Welcome to Passions and my what a passionate
pen you have brought here with you, Jerry.

Fantastic, poem full of imagery and rhythm

~netswan

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7 posted 2000-05-23 07:32 AM


Jerry~
First post - 'First Love'
Welcome to Passion's
Enjoyed the sentiments you expressed.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
8 posted 2000-05-23 07:52 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS,

You have entered in a unique fashion, with lots of style, panache and lovely images...

Enjoy your stay here and make yourself comfortable.

Regards,
Sudhir

 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.

CocoBaci
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9 posted 2000-05-23 09:02 PM


Jerry, I adore these verses you write!
CocoBaci

Ethan Halo
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10 posted 2000-05-23 09:11 PM


Welcome to the party, my friend. good stuff here. very Shakespeare-esque. and he is a tough act to follow and still have the words flow with purpose. this has great imagery. keep it up. i dig it.

Welcome again. enjoy your stay.


 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

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