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Iced Tea Conception

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Martie
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Iced Tea Conception

They were drinking iced tea
at a sidewalk table
where a black lab sprawled
tongue lolling.

She had young long legs,
he, sweet green eyes and a goatee,
they enchanted each other
with a gaze of familiarity
as her ring glinted
and colored a rainbow on the sidewalk.

I want to have a baby
she said
suddenly seriously wiping
the table with her napkin
where a piece of ice
was slowly melting.

Honey…he said
and the word came out slowly,
in it were all the times they’d talked,
all the nights she’d cried
and he had sighed
then loved as though it didn’t matter
when it was squirming warm and sweet smelling
behind her abandon
and staked his heart
with a sizzling fear to the pillow.

She turned her head away
and watched the distance
where her hurt lay visible and aching
and he looked there and saw it too
and reached out and squeezed her hand.

The tree beside the table
hung low branches
and flowers bloomed around its trunk
where a butterfly in lithe grace unfurled
and painted to gorgeous an ordinary leaf
as they left hand in hand
pulling the sniffing dog
from the sweet smelling dirt.




[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-22-2000).]
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Mike
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Wonderfully written Martie.  You almost feel
ashamed reading your poetry, as if your eavesdropping into the lives of a friend, and can't help yourself because of the beauty.
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Oh, Martie!! This is perfect! I could see this couple and their dog..you described it beautifully...
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3 posted 05-22-2000 08:40 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
Uniquely you ... astonishing how you take the slightest movement and it becomes the poems' own.

You are just the best ... that's it !
Hands down !  THE BEST !

You don't need to go thanking me either ...
it's me who thanks YOU !
Love you to pieces ~
~*Marge*~




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WOW Martie, your poetry is so real so vivid, i feel it and see it all. LOVE IT!  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)


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5 posted 05-22-2000 10:49 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Martie,...wonderful work.  Such beauty to your words,...thank you for sharing this.  Oh, BTW,...love the title.
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6 posted 05-23-2000 02:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Now you've done it.....you've left me speechless!  

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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Mike, Marge and Denise have hit three nails on the head. This is truly the stuff of a great novel. There, another nail!
Love you
Liz
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This radiates, Martie!

Corinne
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Mike--Thanks for eavesdropping with me, Mike...there are so many wonderful moments.

Poet de Vine--I'm glad that you could see this picture..I wanted you to.

Marge--I'm thanking you, Marge...and you can't stop me...you are wonderful...love back

Dark Angel--Thank you so much...I really appreciate your lovely reply.

Spitfire--Thank you so much for reading and enjoying this...and the title sort of explains the poem, doesn't it?  I'm glad it drew you in.

Denise--Wow!  What a wonderful compliment...

Corinne--Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment...you know I always enjoy your poetry too.
Elizabeth Santos
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This deserves another look.
Back to the top
Liz
Martie
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11 posted 05-23-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Gosh Liz, I'm sorry I missed you before...thank you so much for being such a fan...you are a wonderful friend.  Love and hugs to you.
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