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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 2000-05-22 05:19 PM


The Fragility Of Life

On sheets of white
Her skin becomes translucent
As shallow breaths
Escape through her pursed lips
Once strong and sure
She now lays scared and weakened
Just flesh on bone
And from life’s grasp she slips

Now two floors up
A woman’s screams are sounding
As her husband
Stands there by her side
One final push
And infant’s cry is noted
One life is born
While down below one dies





 To love means never to be afraid of the windstorms of life: should you shield the canyons from the windstorms you would never see the true beauty of their carvings. ~Elizabeth Kubler-Ross

© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
1 posted 2000-05-22 05:30 PM


Excellent poem Ruth depicting life beginning as another life passes on.
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ireland
2 posted 2000-05-22 05:57 PM


An excellent comparsion between life and death. Clever. I really enjoyed this poem.

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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

Small Black Flowers That Grow In The Sky

"You have your very own number
They dress your cage in its nature
Once you roared now you just grunt lame
Pace around pathetic pound games

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

They drag sticks along your walls
Harvest your ovaries dead mothers crawl
Here comes warden, Christ, temple, elder
Environment not yours you see through it all

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards


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3 posted 2000-05-22 07:37 PM


Hoot~
So many times I've thought
of this beautiful occurrence in life.
The beginning of one ... the ending of another ... the circle of life goes on.

Lovely, tender sentiments, hon.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Lone Wolf
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4 posted 2000-05-22 07:38 PM


Ruth,

This is just a wonderful illustration of how one door opens when another door closes.  The way you have captured the contrast between life and death is fabulous.  This one is a gem!!  

LW

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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-05-22 07:41 PM


The circle of life, an excellent poem Ruth... you have a tough job...I admire anyone who can be there for both the entrance to life and the entrance to Heaven.  
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6 posted 2000-05-22 07:49 PM


The neverending cycle...nicely portrayed.
Martie
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7 posted 2000-05-22 08:29 PM


Beautiful and touching rendering of the circle of life.  Well done, Ruth!
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8 posted 2000-05-22 08:55 PM


Ruth--

you did an excellent and very beautiful job with this. i enjoy your work immensly. you are able to take complex subjects such as life and death and write them in such a way that not only can everyone understand but also can probably relate to. take care!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

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9 posted 2000-05-23 02:32 PM


Life is indeed fragile and should never be taken for granted. Very well done, Ruth!  

Denise

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Floating gently on a cloud....
10 posted 2000-05-23 02:53 PM


The Never-Ending Story....this is a beautiful poem depicting so perfectly the circle of life.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 2000-05-23 08:40 PM


Thank you everyone  
Ethan Halo
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12 posted 2000-05-23 09:07 PM


this was real good. i enjoyed the simplicity melded so wonderfully with depth. it reminded me of the song "lightning crashes", except the pictures were clearer here. good stuff. i dig it.

 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

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13 posted 2000-05-23 09:33 PM


for a second there i thought the wife was being pushed out the window by the hubby but thats just silly me when i reread it o yuh i like
Butterflies_dont_cry
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14 posted 2000-05-23 10:20 PM


Ruth~ What a touching piece.  My friend's son Shane is back in the hospital tonight in ICU...I understand the fragility and also see the gift.  Thank you for sharing this.
TerryW
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15 posted 2000-05-23 11:11 PM


Ruth~
     Very lovely, dear!  I have always put my faith into the simple fact that there is never really an ending - just a new beginning for a new path.



Love Ya~

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

hoot_owl_rn
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16 posted 2000-05-24 08:25 AM


Thank you  

walt...you're too much  

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