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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-05-22 04:46 PM


Numb

I'm listless
dragging
myself,
lost within,
lost without
no answers
dead weight
holding me
back, beyond
despondent.

Can you see me?
No,
I'm not here,
I'm not there,
I'm not anywhere.

Conscious body
walking,
talking, feeling,
yet numb
to priorities,
numb to reality,
numb
desiring
motivation
only receiving
exhaustion.

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brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland
1 posted 2000-05-22 05:06 PM


Conscious body
walking,
talking, feeling,
yet numb
to priorities,
numb to reality,
numb
desiring
motivation
only receiving
exhaustion.

I know this feeling, you have described it perfectly. It always passes, I hope the same is true for you. hang in there soon you will tasting the warmth and beauty of life. Great poem, tahnks for sharing.

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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

Small Black Flowers That Grow In The Sky

"You have your very own number
They dress your cage in its nature
Once you roared now you just grunt lame
Pace around pathetic pound games

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

They drag sticks along your walls
Harvest your ovaries dead mothers crawl
Here comes warden, Christ, temple, elder
Environment not yours you see through it all

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards


Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-05-22 08:01 PM


LD, I know this feeling....you expressed it well...
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-05-22 10:41 PM


~Aahh,...to a "T" my lady, to a "T".  Well done expression. *Hang in there. *Peace.
Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

4 posted 2000-05-23 12:07 PM


How eloquently you have described this altered state...and the format of this piece really highlights the mood...wonderful writing, Lost Dreamer.  

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-05-23 02:04 PM


Gloria, are we really one and the same person? LOL....seriously, you have described the way I have been feeling lately. Thank goodness it passes quickly!! Fabulous poem!

Denise


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