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Our Souls

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Angel`Fox
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0 posted 05-22-2000 04:17 PM       View Profile for Angel`Fox   Email Angel`Fox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Angel`Fox's Home Page   View IP for Angel`Fox


Our Souls

As I look deep inside your eyes I see our souls dancing, engaged in a beautiful erotic dance of love, together at last, the search is over, they found each other, there love will grow with each passing day, our hearts will overflow with joy and burst with happiness, not even death can break this connection it is to strong, may they reach unknown passion and become one, finally they are happy and where they should be, together forever.

By Angel`Fox
05-21-2000
at 3am


"Any comments?"

Thank you!!
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brian madden
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1 posted 05-22-2000 04:28 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

a beautiful thought. thanks for sharing.


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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

Small Black Flowers That Grow In The Sky

"You have your very own number
They dress your cage in its nature
Once you roared now you just grunt lame
Pace around pathetic pound games

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

They drag sticks along your walls
Harvest your ovaries dead mothers crawl
Here comes warden, Christ, temple, elder
Environment not yours you see through it all

Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround
To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks
Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick
For the outside,
The small black flowers that grow in the sky

Here chewing your tail is joy"

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2 posted 05-22-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Angel,
Very nice writing.  I think the title is perfect!!  Oh to be in love again!!  Looking forward to seeing more of your work.

Welcome to Passions!!  

LW

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3 posted 05-22-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

As I look deep inside your eyes
I see our souls dancing,
engaged in a beautiful erotic dance of love, together at last,
the search is over,
they found each other,
there love will grow with each passing day, our hearts will overflow with joy
and burst with happiness,
not even death can break this connection
it is to strong,
may they reach unknown passion
and become one,
finally they are happy
and where they should be,
together forever.

Welcome to Passions, Angel! I like your poem, but I'm the kind of person that likes it laid out..sorry, not everyone is I know.. just my own personal preference. Since you asked for comments I will tell you that you changed from first person to third person halfway through the poem..not a big deal..but you've got some lovely phrases. I definitely would look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email for a special welcome!  
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4 posted 05-22-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

AngelFox~
Lovely thoughts .... just lovely.
Welcome to the family of Passionate poets.
I do like the format that PoetdeVine shared with you ... it just adds so much emphasis to your already beautiful thoughts.
Hope to see more from your pen.
~*Marge*~


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Aimster
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5 posted 05-22-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

I really liked this! You have some beautiful expressions of your heart here. The only suggestion I would make is to do it in some other type of poetry form! But hey I am NO expert. great job!

take care
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Angel`Fox
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6 posted 05-23-2000 12:33 AM       View Profile for Angel`Fox   Email Angel`Fox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Angel`Fox's Home Page   View IP for Angel`Fox

Wow, Thank you all for your comments!! I wanted to share with everyone how I feel,..I am in love woooo hoooo can't beat this feeling!! thank you all again for a great welcome,..I look forward to read all the poems here,...

Angel`Fox
Angel`Fox
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Ottawa, Ontario Canada


7 posted 05-23-2000 12:34 AM       View Profile for Angel`Fox   Email Angel`Fox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Angel`Fox's Home Page   View IP for Angel`Fox

Wow, Thank you all for your comments!! I wanted to share with everyone how I feel,..I am in love woooo hoooo can't beat this feeling!! thank you all again for a great welcome,..I look forward to read all the poems here,...

Angel`Fox


 "Love seeketh not itself to please
Nor for itself hath any care,
But for another gives its ease,
And builds a heaven in hell's despair"
 
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