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Angel`Fox Junior Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 32Ottawa, Ontario Canada |
Our Souls As I look deep inside your eyes I see our souls dancing, engaged in a beautiful erotic dance of love, together at last, the search is over, they found each other, there love will grow with each passing day, our hearts will overflow with joy and burst with happiness, not even death can break this connection it is to strong, may they reach unknown passion and become one, finally they are happy and where they should be, together forever. By Angel`Fox 05-21-2000 at 3am "Any comments?" Thank you!! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a beautiful thought. thanks for sharing. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. Small Black Flowers That Grow In The Sky "You have your very own number They dress your cage in its nature Once you roared now you just grunt lame Pace around pathetic pound games Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick For the outside, The small black flowers that grow in the sky They drag sticks along your walls Harvest your ovaries dead mothers crawl Here comes warden, Christ, temple, elder Environment not yours you see through it all Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick For the outside, The small black flowers that grow in the sky Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Angel, Very nice writing. I think the title is perfect!! Oh to be in love again!! Looking forward to seeing more of your work. Welcome to Passions!!  LW |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
As I look deep inside your eyes I see our souls dancing, engaged in a beautiful erotic dance of love, together at last, the search is over, they found each other, there love will grow with each passing day, our hearts will overflow with joy and burst with happiness, not even death can break this connection it is to strong, may they reach unknown passion and become one, finally they are happy and where they should be, together forever. Welcome to Passions, Angel! I like your poem, but I'm the kind of person that likes it laid out..sorry, not everyone is I know.. just my own personal preference. Since you asked for comments I will tell you that you changed from first person to third person halfway through the poem..not a big deal..but you've got some lovely phrases. I definitely would look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email for a special welcome!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AngelFox~ Lovely thoughts .... just lovely. Welcome to the family of Passionate poets. I do like the format that PoetdeVine shared with you ... it just adds so much emphasis to your already beautiful thoughts. Hope to see more from your pen. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
I really liked this! You have some beautiful expressions of your heart here. The only suggestion I would make is to do it in some other type of poetry form! But hey I am NO expert. great job! take care amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Angel`Fox Junior Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 32Ottawa, Ontario Canada |
Wow, Thank you all for your comments!! I wanted to share with everyone how I feel,..I am in love woooo hoooo can't beat this feeling!! thank you all again for a great welcome,..I look forward to read all the poems here,... Angel`Fox |
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Angel`Fox Junior Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 32Ottawa, Ontario Canada |
Wow, Thank you all for your comments!! I wanted to share with everyone how I feel,..I am in love woooo hoooo can't beat this feeling!! thank you all again for a great welcome,..I look forward to read all the poems here,... Angel`Fox "Love seeketh not itself to please Nor for itself hath any care, But for another gives its ease, And builds a heaven in hell's despair" |
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