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Master
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0 posted 2000-05-22 02:24 PM


*I know you're tired of these, but here's another translation from A. Pushkin.

Cold frost and sunshine: day of wonder!
My dear old friend, you’re still in slumber—
Wake up, my beauty, time belies:  
You dormant eyes, I beg you, broaden
Toward the northerly Aurora,
As though a northern star arise!

Recall last night, the snow was whirling,
Across the sky, the haze was twirling,  
The moon, as though a pale dye,
Emerged with yellow through faint clouds.
And there you sat, immersed in doubts,
And now, -- just take a look outside:

The snow below the bluish skies,
Like a majestic carpet lies,
And in the light of day it shimmers.
The woods are dusky. Through the frost
The greenish fir-trees are exposed;
And under ice, a river glitters.

The room is lit with amber light.
And bursting, popping in delight
Hot stove still rattles in a fray.
While it is nice to hear its clatter,
Perhaps, we should command to saddle
A fervent mare into the sleight?

And sliding on the morning snow
Dear friend, we’ll let our worries go,
And with the zealous mare we’ll flee.
We’ll visit empty ranges, thence,
The woods, which used to be so dense
And then the shore, so dear to me.


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 "I will not whole die, my soul in sacred lyre,
will outlive my dust and will escape decay,
And in the moonlit sphere, my glory will not tire
As long as poets still remain" A. Pushkin




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Master
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1 posted 2000-05-22 07:35 PM


Can you guys help me out? does this one sound a bit forced to you?
Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-05-22 08:40 PM


I like it..the only verse that sounds forced is the first one..not sure what it is about it, but it's a little off kilter...but otherwise a splendid read!!!
Master
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3 posted 2000-05-22 09:25 PM


I'll see what I can do... thank you for your suggestion deVine!
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2000-05-23 12:04 PM


Not knowing what the challenge of translation is---I dare not offer anything but gratitude for introducing me to such lovely poetry.  Tired, not I, master...please continue...
Master
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5 posted 2000-05-23 06:33 AM


Thanks serenity, and you know I will... LOL
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