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~Who's to Blame~~

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 05-21-2000 10:54 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry



Master plan or cruelest fate
I loved you beyond belief
Sure Iíll die from pain so great
Youíve left me to drown in grief

Dagger of  hate sliced so deep
Razor sharp words cut to bone
You laugh as my heart hopes seep
True colors you have now shown

Self love is your motive used
The unknown prey was my heart
This which you cruelly abused
With evil you hid at the start

A slow moving hateful plan
To give me love, then take back
Forgive?...I donít think I can
When itís my trust you attack

As I heal the walls are built
I canít live through this again
I hope you are plagued with guilt
Then again....I LET you in

I had the choice to turn back
My eyes shut when you came
This a self-induced attack
I have only me to blame




 The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams

~Eleanor Roosevelt~
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Sven
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1 posted 05-21-2000 11:22 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

BDC,
    it's a shame when we let people into our lives that we think are going to help and love and take care of us only to have them betray that trust. . .

That shows in this poem, it's full of hurt and feelings of that betrayal. . .

Excellent poem. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

warmhrt
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2 posted 05-21-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for warmhrt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for warmhrt

BDC,

You did a great job in expressing your feelings within this poem. I'm there with ya...it's so sad when we find out people we care for are not who we thought they were, and we who treat others as we would like to be treated seem to get hurt more often.  

Very nice work,
Kris

 the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing
A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare
netswan
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3 posted 05-22-2000 06:00 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Wonderful and well written butterfly,
am proud of you!  Saw the title and my
first thought to who's to blame is the
was you, of course.  As most people won't accept the blame or realize that
in life we all have faults.  

Forgiving them after you have been ditzed
upon can only leave your soft heart to blame
BUT don't let that stop you from loving again.  NO reason to take that kind of blame.
We love, we give, we get hurt - we forgive because we believe all are good like we are.
We get crushed.  BUT butterfly do not lose
trust for there are more who are trustworthy
than not ------take heart.

netswan
EagleOne
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4 posted 05-22-2000 08:42 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

ņnother great piece from the heart Butterfly. Not always easy to find an answer to such a question. Take Care!

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien
Janet Marie
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5 posted 05-22-2000 08:56 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Forgive?...I donít think I can
When itís my trust you attack

As I heal the walls are built
I canít live through this again
I hope you are plagued with guilt
Then again....I LET you in

I had the choice to turn back
My eyes shut when you came
This a self-induced attack
I have only me to blame
-------------

whoa, my sweet SS, you went deep for this one,
and you bleed with grace in every line.
you know i feel every word.
you know ... I know ... we know ...
WISH we DIDN'T know...
there is much I could say to this ...
but the thing that needs to be said the most is...
we must not close our selves off to leting love in...not everytime is a mistake and not every time, will it end in pain.
And we must not blame ourselves for loving someone.Remember how wonderful it felt in the begining...no one can be blamed for needing and wanting to let that in.
Heal in the sanctuary of those walls, but then come back out into the sunshine and feel its warmth again.
Otherwise we miss the rainbows that follow the rain.
Love you girl,
read my new signature, it applies here ...
feel free to take the "butterfly quote"for your sig.
I thought of you as well as my own sweet butterfly when I read it.
A friend sent it to me as a gift...
so I will do the same for you. *smile*
jm

 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Lorraine Nisbet
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6 posted 05-22-2000 12:25 PM       View Profile for Lorraine Nisbet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lorraine Nisbet


Double Wow!  I really like this.

~Lorraine
Danny Holloway
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7 posted 05-22-2000 07:01 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Mariposas no lloran,
This poem is really well written.  Great job with the rhyme!
Love can bring the greatest joy or worst pain!  It's an uncertain game, but we all play it, hoping to win!
Enjoyed your poem!


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Lone Wolf
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8 posted 05-22-2000 07:25 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

BDC,

Oh how true, my friend.  Hard to see those we loved and trusted for who they really are.  Only to discover that we were so wrong about them all along.  Very unfortunate circumstance.  You have expressed this very well.  Great writing!!  

LW
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9 posted 05-22-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

BDC--

this was very deep, intense, painful, and EXCELLENT!! i am so sorry you know this kind of loss and pain. however i think to blame yourself for loving someone is a little harsh. for if you had never let that person in you would have never known the sweetness of love. i know im only 23 but in my short time i have learned that sometimes its better to have loved for the moment than to never have loved at all. we only get once chance at this life, and we are bound to get hurt and make mistakes. sometimes people hurt us VERY badly and we think we can't move on. but i know from your writing that you have a true inner strength that you haven't even begin to tap into yet. i wish for you nothing but blue skies, a new love that is worthy of you, and much happiness. may your heart and soul begin the journey of healing and may your tomorrows be sunny and bright!
take care
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
lorilockheart
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10 posted 05-22-2000 10:11 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

Isn't it so frustrating to be so drawn to someone, even when you think you shouldn't?  It's almost like you can't help it and then you get so angry with yourself.  I've been there too, don't feel bad.  "That which does not kill us only makes us stronger".  I know - an old cliche.  But one I try to remember in times like these.
Lori

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Michael
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11 posted 05-22-2000 11:04 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

BDC, I don't know if this is something you can truly blame yourself for.  Most of us dream of finding love, that special feeling that overwhelms you completely in another.  Then there are those who take advantage of that longing in others.  I myself would rather take the chance of being taking advantage of than not not giving my heart at all.  Your love is a beautiful thing, where the blame in this lies I cannot say but the shame in no way lies with you.     ((HUGS))


Michael
Butterflies_dont_cry
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12 posted 05-22-2000 11:08 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Sven* Thank you, yes there is alot of hurt still here, but it gets easier each day  

Kris* A side effect of loving completely...loving blindly, Thank you.

Netswan* What a wise sould you are.....Thank you so much!

EagleOne* No, it's not easy but love isn't always easy is it   Thank you

J.M. LOL you know me don't you!!  A hundred thunder storms are worth one rainbow are they not? Thank you S.S.  And the gift....no words express what I feel, I know what your butterfly meant to you and for you to share this.....thank you doesn't say enough but I hope you know.

Lorraine* Thank you

Danny* and play and play and......**snake eyes** Drat!!   Thank you.

L.W. Never know unless we try, and most know going in that they may get hurt- it's worth the chance to be wrong though, Thank you my friend.

Lori* Just like the moth to the flame   I guess I never took heed to the "don't play with fire" bit, besides my feet are always cold....have to warm up somehow...lol Thank you for reading  


 The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams

~Eleanor Roosevelt~
Butterflies_dont_cry
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13 posted 05-22-2000 11:16 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Michael...just like you to slip in quietly through the back door   I would blame myself more if I hadn't given it all that I had, and seeing that this is the only way that I know how to love....I have to take the chance.  Thank you so much for you kind reply...and the ((Hugs)) were nice too  

 The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams

~Eleanor Roosevelt~

~Butterflies are meant to be free~
(a gift from J.M.)
 
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