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hailfellow
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0 posted 05-20-2000 08:22 PM       View Profile for hailfellow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hailfellow

It's been awhile, but here's a little diddy I wrote up.  Don't pick on it too much.


Whisper softly in my ear, you know the words to say;
Causing my heart to flutter so, turning somersaults within.
Those few words and how you say them, turn my legs to mud,
And my eyes to melted ice, tickling my upturned lips.
Spinal chills, up and down, in rhythm with your quiet breath;
I twitch and reel and laugh out loud, so say those words again.




 hailfellow
"If life had no sense and I had to choose nonsense, then I too should consider this the most sensible nonsense."
~Nietzsche
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Lone Wolf
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1 posted 05-20-2000 08:27 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

halifellow,

Very good piece!!  I think you have it bad for someone....hehe.  I like this a lot...very sweet.  

Welcome to Passions!

LW

brian madden
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2 posted 05-21-2000 05:17 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Sounds like true love to me, a beautiful piece.
Also like the Nietzsche quote. Though how did you get the text so small, I have tried everything but I can't figure it out. ☺ 

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Meadowmuse
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3 posted 05-21-2000 05:23 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Isn't it delightful and curious how, spoken just so and by just the right person, certain words can send us into euphoria? This is wonderful!

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Cerenity
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4 posted 05-22-2000 08:44 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi hailfellow,

You said it wonderfully how it feels when someone talks to you like this wow! Very good.

Love,  Cerenity
Crystal Lynn
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5 posted 05-23-2000 07:53 PM       View Profile for Crystal Lynn   Email Crystal Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Crystal Lynn

heh...its a cute poem..wish someone would whisper in my ear >wink<
epoet
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6 posted 05-23-2000 07:59 PM       View Profile for epoet   Email epoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for epoet

thoughtful poem, really like it.  first one of yours that i've seen but i like your style

 P. J. Kotrch
Corinne
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7 posted 05-23-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Very sensous.

Corinne
Lorraine Nisbet
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8 posted 05-23-2000 08:30 PM       View Profile for Lorraine Nisbet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lorraine Nisbet


Hi hailfellow,

Great little ditty!  

~Lorraine
wayoutwalt
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9 posted 05-23-2000 08:56 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i liked this one yuh more frome you kkk?

 in a canyon in a cavern excavatin for a mine
dwelt a miner forty niner and his daughter clemintine!!! yeehaw!
hailfellow
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10 posted 05-23-2000 09:00 PM       View Profile for hailfellow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hailfellow

Wow!  I didn't expect this much of a reply.  Thank you all so much for the nice comments.  For those of you who would like to know, I do have other poems posted on the forum.  If you do a search, you'll find a couple.  Thanks again.  Wow!
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