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Whisper softly
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Whisper softly |
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hailfellow Junior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 28 |
It's been awhile, but here's a little diddy I wrote up. Don't pick on it too much. Whisper softly in my ear, you know the words to say; Causing my heart to flutter so, turning somersaults within. Those few words and how you say them, turn my legs to mud, And my eyes to melted ice, tickling my upturned lips. Spinal chills, up and down, in rhythm with your quiet breath; I twitch and reel and laugh out loud, so say those words again. hailfellow "If life had no sense and I had to choose nonsense, then I too should consider this the most sensible nonsense." ~Nietzsche |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
halifellow, Very good piece!! I think you have it bad for someone....hehe. I like this a lot...very sweet.  Welcome to Passions! LW |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sounds like true love to me, a beautiful piece. Also like the Nietzsche quote. Though how did you get the text so small, I have tried everything but I can't figure it out. ☺ ================================= "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-21-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Isn't it delightful and curious how, spoken just so and by just the right person, certain words can send us into euphoria? This is wonderful! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi hailfellow, You said it wonderfully how it feels when someone talks to you like this wow! Very good. Love, Cerenity |
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Crystal Lynn Junior Member
since 2000-05-21
Posts 18Miami, FL. USA |
heh...its a cute poem..wish someone would whisper in my ear >wink< |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
thoughtful poem, really like it. first one of yours that i've seen but i like your style P. J. Kotrch |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very sensous. Corinne |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Hi hailfellow, Great little ditty! ~Lorraine |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i liked this one yuh more frome you kkk? in a canyon in a cavern excavatin for a mine dwelt a miner forty niner and his daughter clemintine!!! yeehaw! |
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hailfellow Junior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 28 |
Wow! I didn't expect this much of a reply. Thank you all so much for the nice comments. For those of you who would like to know, I do have other poems posted on the forum. If you do a search, you'll find a couple. Thanks again. Wow! |
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