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Mike
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0 posted 05-20-2000 06:17 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

As solemn silence reverberates,
...over pall of dying day,
Evening darkens into night,
...death's calm on land does lay.

From afar, repose is broken,
...by sound of nature's hymns,
Vespers of a settling wind,
...sound forth through muted limbs.

With fading rays of sinking sun,
...shadows stalk the winds of fate,
Silent death with razored claws,
...springs forth from Eden's gate.

As solemn silence reverberates,
...over pall of dying fawn,
The forest and its creatures,
...wait advent of the dawn.

In Luna's light, shadows dance,
...across dawn's silent threshold,
Darkness fades, its anger spent,
...an eerie calm betold.

First breath of morning softly whispers,
...upon lush land below,
As eastern sky in garden blooms,
...at touch of sun's first glow.

Amidst the splendor of day's wakening,
...feral creatures pause,
In cathedral of the forest,
...as hush of night withdraws.

In that fleeting, tranquil instant,
...t'wixt darkness and the morn,
Amongst the forest, and its creatures,
...a speckled fawn is born.



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 05-20-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Mike - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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1 posted 05-20-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Stunning, beautiful images that perfectly captures the magic of nature.
Martie
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2 posted 05-20-2000 06:28 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Mike, I'm so glad to see you!!  This poem is wonderful and magical with moonlight and the going out and coming of life...beautiful imagery...great work!
Lorraine Nisbet
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3 posted 05-20-2000 06:36 PM       View Profile for Lorraine Nisbet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lorraine Nisbet

Wow!  Thank you for taking me there.

~Loraine~
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4 posted 05-20-2000 06:41 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

So fitting for the morning to issue new life into the forest, after the darkness has taken same. The scene of this beautiful poem and the way you've told this story is magical, Mike. Lovely metaphorical writing.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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5 posted 05-20-2000 07:10 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Lovely to read you again sir.. and as always you bring a delicate touch to your poetry. I love this..as beautiful and tender as that newborn fawn.  
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6 posted 05-20-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike~
This may well be the prettiest poem I will read this day.  
The critters of the forest bring forth such lovely images.
You have written a piece that I think is wonderful.
~*Marge*~


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Mike
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7 posted 05-21-2000 10:05 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Brian, thank you ever so much for the gracious reply.
Martie, smiling here... hope you enjoyed your dance with the moon last night.
Lorraine, glad you enjoyed the journey into my little world.
Claire, dealing in the dark, sometimes I have to force myself to remember the dawn. By the way, have we ever metaphor? (sorry, it's been a long weekend, *smile*) Thank you to a magical poetess.
Ms. deVine., why do people always call me sir?  that's not what my four kids call me...hehe   Appreciate the reply and glad you enjoyed.
Marge, if this turned out to be one of the prettiest poems you read this day, you didn't read many of your own.  Thank you ever so much for the gracious comment... your love of nature comes out so strongly in your poetry.
Meadowmuse
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8 posted 05-21-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Mike, we may have...were you ever in Synecdoche? or somewhere simile??  
Nan
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9 posted 05-21-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Awesome... of course!!

Denise
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10 posted 05-21-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very beautiful, Mike! Nothing unusual for you! So very nice to see you again!  

Denise

Nan- cute picture!
Mike
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11 posted 05-21-2000 07:43 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Heavens to Zeugma, I'm lost in paronomasia...
she's using five dollar words on me...
send help, I'm somewhere between hysteron proternon...   nope... think I would have remembered Claire...  *smile*
thank you for the awesome Nan...  I've heard rumors you're pretty awesome.
Nice to see you also Denise. *smile*
glad you liked.
Lone Wolf
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12 posted 05-21-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Mike,

Very beautiful work.  Love the imagery you used throughout....breathtaking.  The birth of a fawn at the end is just perfect!!  

LW
 
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