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Marge Tindal
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You Said It Best
~*Marge Tindal*~

You said it best
when you said goodbye
Left without leaving
no reason to cry
Memories remain
to pool in the eye
Brimming over lashes
caught in deny
Trickling down
absorbed in cheap tissue
Reasons don't matter
it's not even the issue
No more indifference
No more ridicule
No more playing
by someone else's rules
No flowers
No Encore
No rave reviews
It's over
Final Act
We've both paid the dues
Circumstance commands
we give our all
You said it best
Goodbye
Curtain falls





 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Mistikman
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1 posted 05-20-2000 01:34 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

This is a lot sadder than the stuff I am used to by you Marge. I am sorry for you for whatever inspired this poem. It is very well written, I like the parallel to a play in it.
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2 posted 05-20-2000 01:46 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mistik~
Hon, thank you for your concern.
Not necessary, but appreciated just the same.

It was written for a very melodramatic friend who is truly the 'greatest actress' on the 'stage of life' ...
It's simply a  -
Ponder
Of
Emerging
Melodrama

Love you for thinking of me.
~*Marge*~


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3 posted 05-20-2000 02:59 PM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

this was great marge. i like it. remembering without regrets. i dig it, and i relate. i like the theatre allusions too. hope this venting made ya feel better =)

 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.
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4 posted 05-20-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

That was wonderful Marge...and tragic. It flows so well

"You said it best
Goodbye
Curtain falls"

take a bow, standing ovation. To broadway with this poem you go.
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5 posted 05-20-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Obviously a fantasy. No man in his right mind could ever say goodbye to you, Marge. (You really use cheap tissues?)
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marge--

this was much different than the style i am use to seeing from you, however i still liked it very much! you show your true talents in this one as a diverse writer of many unique styles. whether you are right about love, hope, or in this case losing someone you do it with such grace and elegance. i admire you and hope that you get through this rough spot in your life. i know it is hard but you appear very strong from the way you write.
take care and much love,
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
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Ethan~
Love, it wasn't a 'vent' ... it was for a friend.  Read replies above/below.  Glad you enjoyed it ... very theatrical I am !  

BrianM~
Thank you   .. thank you   .. thank you.

Balladeer~
Not a fantasy ... just not my 'play'.
Aren't you glad you didn't buy tickets ?
Love you doll !  
LOL at 'cheap tissues' ...
actually at this theatre
it's all they provide.
Kind of like the ones at a funeral parlor.

Aimster~
It's simply a  -

Ponder
Of
Emerging
Melodrama

for a friend 'on stage'.
Thank you for all the nice compliments
and the concern.
~*Marge*~





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Marge,

Just love the ending.....simply perfect!!  The play analogy deserves many applause.  Very original.  Great writing as always!!  

LW



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Very well done, Marge... one of my favorites from you... love the metaphor... makes for doubled layer meanings and a powerful punch

these are great lines here:

"No flowers
No Encore
No rave reviews
It's over
Final Act"


fine writing!

-dp
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This is great writing, Marge.

Marie~
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LoneWolf~
Thank you.  
It would seem that all the world
is indeed a stage ...
and we play our parts through dramatic scenes.

Doreen~
I appreciate your comments more than you could know.  Thank you.

Mariee~
Thank you my friend.
You brighten my world.
~*Marge*~


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12 posted 05-21-2000 12:21 AM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

This sounds like my best friend's current life.
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"Left without leaving"

Love that line Marge, may have to borrow that one hehe

great poem m'friend

 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep


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marge yur versatlilty shines
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Marge glad I read the other posts as I was feeling very sad for you and thought Oh Marge must be going through a very tough time after reading the poem. Then I read your replies and that cleared everything up.
HUGS anyway
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe


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Tara~
Different theatre marquee ... same play.
Hope she 'brings the house down'.

Jeffrey~
So pleased you enjoyed.
By all means .. be my guest.

Walt~
Yuh ... might not be my 'best'
but I like.   
Thanks for 'versatility' ...
important to me.

Tracie~
I LOVE a REPLY reader .. I'm one too.
Glad you were concerned about me though.
Someone else's heartache this round.
Thank you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Marge, this is excellent!! Next play of yours, I want to book a seat in the front row! Have to say, you had me going for a minute until I read all of the replies and sighed a big sigh of relief! Love ya!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


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Excellent, Marge, I think this is one of your best to date!

Denise
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Lil' Lizzie~
Honey, you delight me.
Front row tickets it is ...
and back-stage passes too.

Denise~
Yuh !  Maybe so .. cuz Walt told me
it could be the BEST if I wanted it too !  
Thanks, gal.
~*Marge*~


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