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Cages

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Cyndol Claycamp
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since 05-17-2000
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0 posted 05-20-2000 02:15 AM       View Profile for Cyndol Claycamp   Email Cyndol Claycamp   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cyndol Claycamp

    Title: Cages

I never used to ask
where to go
what to do.
It just came natural
wake up, go to school
tennis do home work
then dinner and bed.
Then one day you walked in
with the key to my cage.
You opened me up
and showed me I could do anything.
Then you left me
but I am still free
and can see all those in cages now.
All my peers but the leaders
have thrown their keys out of reach
so they can not unlock themselves.
I feel
I breathe
I bleed
I hurt.
I do all these as others do.
But so different am I .
I am not a stranger to any.
I feel most  from being alone.
All the different I am  
is in one word
but means many.
Freedom
to be able to do anything
and feel and think what I want.
But I still canít do everything
for I canít fit in with all.
But there is a price for everything
for those I am different from
lock themselves in a cage
unable to do everything they wish
But I do not stay with them
for I march on my own path
alone and afraid
While hearing words that bring pain
to me from those behind
because of their envy.
But I will show no fear as I walk a head
though no one walks with me.

P.S: I did not go into great detail so the reader can use imagination.
© Copyright 2000 Cyndol Claycamp - All Rights Reserved
Cyndol Claycamp
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since 05-17-2000
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1 posted 05-20-2000 02:27 AM       View Profile for Cyndol Claycamp   Email Cyndol Claycamp   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cyndol Claycamp

Sorry I thought this was where you look at the poem and make a suggestion can some tell me where to find the rules so I don't keep messing up.How do you do Icons?

brian madden
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since 05-06-2000
Posts 4532
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2 posted 05-20-2000 05:39 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Hi Cyndol, I am glad that you found freedom and chose to walk your path. It has always being my way of thinking. I am reminded of an E.E Cumming's quote, he said it better than I ever could, "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

As for your problem, I might be able to help, After "submit reply" you will be brought back to the page with your poem. On the top right hand corner of the screen are links that say, the name of your poem, the name of the forum (in this case forum 7), and then main menu(Passions forum). For more indepth comments into your work you should try Critical Analysis. which can be found on the passions forum page. Has this been of any help at all?  
  

[This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-20-2000).]
 
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