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Ethan Halo
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0 posted 05-20-2000 03:17 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo


I Promise to Remember

You set my self on fire
whenever I touch your face.
Never thought that Heaven and Hell
could be in the same place.

Iíd give my life to hold you;
And if I stay I mightÖ
My ears will always have your voice.
My eyes wonít lose your sight.

Please donít say goodbye and let it end.
Even farewells donít last forever.
I promise that Iíll hold you again.
I promise to remember.

Iíll not let go; Iíll keep you with me
as I break onto the darker path.
Youíre my trail of bread crumbs;
I promise Iím cominí back.

They say you donít know your strength
until the time that you are tested.
Weíve all got our demons and we
canít stop Ďtil these are bested.

Iíll fight and fight.
Iíll make amends.
If it takes an eternity,
Iíll see you again.

Iím struggling to transcend
to the light I need to find.
Could this new horizon Iím looking for
be in the world I left behindÖ

Sometimes our paths, they cross.
But Iím always fighting against you.
Never said this was a Better beginning;
Just said that it was New.

We grew up way too fast.
The present makes the past a blur.
You moved on and I tried to bury it.
Weíll never be the way we were.



†We all got somethin' we need to atone for.




[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 05-23-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Ethan Halo - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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1 posted 05-20-2000 05:16 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Hi Ethan I really really enjoyed reading this, a great poem, some fantastic imagery,
I love the second last verse.  

"We grew up way too fast.
The present makes the past a blur.
You moved on and I tried to bury it.
Weíll never be the way we were".

Janet Marie
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2 posted 05-20-2000 07:23 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

You set my self on fire
whenever I touch you face.
Never thought the Heaven and Hell
could in the same place.

Iíd give my life to hold you;
And if I stay I mightÖ
My ears will always have your voice.
My eyes wonít lose your sight.
-----------------
We grew up way too fast.
The present makes the past a blur.
You moved on and I tried to bury it.
Weíll never be the way we were.

Sometimes our paths, they cross.
But Iím always fighting against you.
Never said this was a Better beginning;
Just said that it was New.
---------------

WOW..way cool Ethan...
I was looking forward to your response of the challenge...
this is perfect.
lots of your soul in this.
So many questions...
the hard ones to answer of ourselves.
whats that old saying ... becareful what you wish for?
but then again...what if she is the one...fate intended.
good luck in findin the answers my friend..
let me know when you find them...
let us all know *smile*
Let me think about a title,
need more caffeine than I've had yet this morn
should be something to do with the word fate me thinks tho,
later,
jm


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


3 posted 05-20-2000 07:44 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Excellent poem, Ethan_,

Very delicate soul-stirring words..

Title, what about
Being an ant, looking for bread crumbs...  

Sorry.... just kidding.

Regards,
Sudhir




 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.
LadySofia
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4 posted 05-20-2000 07:50 AM       View Profile for LadySofia   Email LadySofia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit LadySofia's Home Page   View IP for LadySofia

Dear Ethan,
How about "Transcending Paths" for a title? Very good poem, I liked the analogies you used here.

^_^ LadySofia



 That time of year thou mayst in me behold, When yellow leaves, or none, or few, do hang, Upon those boughs which shake against the cold, Bare ruined choirs where late the sweet birds sang. In me thou see'st the twilight of such day, As after sunset fadeth in the west, Which by-and-by black night doth take away, Death's second self that seals up all in rest. In me thou see'st the glowing of such fire, That on the ashes of his youth doth lie, As the deathbed whereon it must expire, Consumed with that which it was nourished by. This thou perciev'st, which makes thy love more strong, To love that well which thou must leave ere long.
William Shakespeare


Marge Tindal
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5 posted 05-20-2000 09:15 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Ethan~
This is full of wonderful thoughts.

How about your own line for the title -

'I Promise To Remember'
Enjoyed.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Ethan Halo
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6 posted 05-20-2000 02:55 PM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

Dear all who replied,
thanks for the suggestions. i appreciate y'all readin this. i took Marge's advice, though. (good call marge. i dig it.)

JM- there are no answers...there is no spoon. =) j/k in truth, it's like ObiWan told Luke:
"don't trust your eyes. they can deceive you. stretch out with your feelings."


[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 05-20-2000).]
Jeffrey Carter
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7 posted 05-21-2000 12:48 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Ethan, Of all the responces this challenge got I, for one, think this was the best (just my opinion)

 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep


Ethan Halo
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Posts 820
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8 posted 05-21-2000 04:03 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

Jeffrey,
that's a bold statement. =) thanks for the support. i appreciate it. and thanks for the challenge. i been meaning to vent that stuff, and now i feel... better i guess. =)thanks again!


 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.
 
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